[S.T.C]

thirteen,clever and bored
staring out of my window
so unadored..

all alone..and time to roam
around these rain soaked streets
i call home

Sunday papers ,blown away
across the old park
were i used to play

why don`t you believe me
when i say ,i talk for hours
 on a broken phone

in my  two up, two down
same as every other house
in the town

a red brick paradise,
so very comfortable,
i`m sure
you could be living next door
to Louis Pasteur

thirteen clever and bored
staring out of my window
so unadored.

all alone..and time to roam
around these rain soaked streets
i call home

Sunday papers, blown away
across the old park
were i used to play.

why don`t you believe
me when i say
i talk for hours
on a broken phone.

why don`t you believe me

i`m not a special case
just finding my place
in the human race.

in my two up,two down
same as every other house
in this town

a red brick paradise
so very comfortable
i`m sure
you could be living next door
to Louis Pasteur  

I`m not am special case
I`m not a special case

i walk these rain streets
i call home.

so unadored,so unadored.

I`m a big Morrisey fan so got up early to write this
in his style.









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Yes 'unadored' would be a very Morrissey word. I'm a big fan of Morrissey's lyrics too and you've achieved a good song in his style.
Only bit I'm not keen on is:

i`m not a special case
just finding my place
in the human race.

It's just so cliche'd and overused -  and in 'Bigmouth Strikes Again' Steven himself sings:

'And I've got no right to take my place
With the Human race'

Maybe you intended that as a 'nod', I don't know, but where his has an unusual slant on it - invoking of self-loathing as it is, yours has been used a lot before in slightly different forms. Anyhow - didn't work for me. Louis Pasteur bit was good though!

That aside I thought it was great, but needs pairing with very un-smiths like music or it will sound like an obvious parody.

[S.T.C]

Yes 'unadored' would be a very Morrissey word. I'm a big fan of Morrissey's lyrics too and you've achieved a good song in his style.
Only bit I'm not keen on is:

i`m not a special case
just finding my place
in the human race.

It's just so cliche'd and overused -  and in 'Bigmouth Strikes Again' Steven himself sings:

'And I've got no right to take my place
With the Human race'

Maybe you intended that as a 'nod', I don't know, but where his has an unusual slant on it - invoking of self-loathing as it is, yours has been used a lot before in slightly different forms. Anyhow - didn't work for me. Louis Pasteur bit was good though!

That aside I thought it was great, but needs pairing with very un-smiths like music or it will sound like an obvious parody.

yeah, i noticed that a couple of minutes ago,,its like big mouth...will leave it in for now

It was only really an exercise in writing...you`ve got to be Morrisey to really write his songs...