Sun - more of a poem

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Dave Smith94

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« on: February 28, 2012, 05:26:11 PM »
Where has spring gone,
Has winter been prolonged?

Ive been talking to the sun,

He says he hates when morning comes,

I asked why do we get the blame,

He said evryone needs a name to shame,

I asked him why no one cares,

He said you dont believe in theirs,

I asked him which way to turn,

He said look up and you will learn.

lightspeed182

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« Reply #1 on: February 28, 2012, 05:37:29 PM »


 nice words , very visual

Dave Smith94

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« Reply #2 on: February 28, 2012, 05:45:37 PM »
thanks pal, wrote it a couple of years ago

lightspeed182

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« Reply #3 on: February 28, 2012, 06:15:57 PM »


  yeah, i think it stands well as a poem on its own and if you want to put music to it,
  nice one