[Timo89]

His eyes are empty
There's no vitality anymore
Though he has survived the madness
His life has been taken away

“Flashbacks by day!
Nightmares by night!
My soul is scarred for ever
I guess my life will never be the same again”

He returned home
He thought that he would find peace again
But war has followed him
Followed him home

“Flashbacks by day!
Nightmares by night!
My soul is scarred for ever
I guess my life will never be the same again”

He didn’t know what he was in for
Until the first time that he saw
The true and ugly face of war

“Flashbacks by day!
Nightmares by night!
My soul is scarred for ever
I guess my life will never be the same again”


I guess the message is quite clear.

[nooms]

yes, message comes over well timo.
really good lyric.
not sure why you go from first person to third, do you hear another voice ?
think it would work just as well as all third person but by the by...

i would suggest simplifying it slightly by losing some of the unnecessary words :
'nightmares' are self explanatory and your adding the 'by night' to keep the rythm and you dont need to
but then again i dont know what you have in mind and im out of order...

flashbacks
nightmares
the soul is scarred for ever
his life will never be the same again'

whatever its the  'followed him home' that is the heart of it...
well writ.
nooms

[Timo89]

I get your point and I think you're right. "nightmares by night" works really good in german (albträume bei nacht) but yeah "by night" is unnecessary in english.
And because of the 1st person thing: I wanted to create a contrast to the verses. The chorus should be out of "his" perspective.

Thanks for your feedback.

[The Corsair]

Feels like it overstates the point without spicing it up through metaphors and the like

Good message nonetheless

[ShAaShAy]

message was heard sound and clear, just a matter of that spark in it.
good one