Two words for you Kafla
Prog Rock
Ok so yes that's 'cheating' in a sense because any syllable count and structure can be worked into a prog song...
But yes, I do agree with Kafla, it doesn;t really seem to be much of a
song and is really more a poem. There's little distinction between the two when it comes to lyrics, yes, but I think the lack of clear structure and (perhaps more importantly) the lack of a repeated 'mini-structure' would define this as a poem rather than a song
Still, excellently written!