[calafinestrat]

Soundcloud Link:
https://tinyurl.com/2mm5akn3

Just written this song, not my usual style, it's turned out a bit like an early green day song but that wasn't the original intention. Best through an amp or headphones. Hope you like it.

Lyrics:
 
Please let me know what you're trying to do
Are you trying to make me jealous of you
D'ya get a kick out of flirting with the guys
Staring at them with those come and get me eyes

Sorry honey I just need a girl that's true
And I've realised that girl was never you
So while you've been out looking for attention
Here's a little thing that I forgot to mention

I've had enough of you
I've found somebody new
She'll give me all her love
She's all I'm thinking of
She'll never mess around
She'll never let me down
Please stay away from me
Don't need your company
I thought that you were sweet
But you were just a cheat
I'm showing you the door
Don't love you any more

You never loved me you took me for a fool
Always telling me that I was really cool
Did'ya think that I fell for all your lies
I stopped believing but you didn't realise

I only want a girl who doesn't mess around
Doesn't play away with every guy in town
Before you tell me that it wasn't your intention
Here's a little thing that I forgot to mention

I've had enough of you
I've found somebody new
She'll give me all her love
She's all I'm thinking of
She'll never mess around
She'll never let me down
Please stay away from me
Don't need your company
I thought that you were sweet
But you were just a cheat
I'm showing you the door
Don't love you any more

[Elvis Nash]

Haven't heard Green Day in awhile
Sounds good man , real rocking vibe , damn tight !!

[calafinestrat]

@Elvis Nash
Thanks Elvis, much appreciated

[kevysc]

@calafinestrat  Nice rocking vibe and a great hook with the title line. Really interesting vocal treatment, what effects are you using? This would certainly get everyone dancing , nice one Kevin

[calafinestrat]

@kevysc  Thanks for the nice comments Kevin. I used garageband vocal setting dreamy and four separate vocal tracks at slightly different volumes.

[kevysc]

@kevysc  Thanks for the nice comments Kevin. I used garageband vocal setting dreamy and four separate vocal tracks at slightly different volumes.

Cool, thanks for sharing ....must play around with that

[moraamarolaloba]

Hola rocking man!!! Really a r rock song, like the atmosphere given by the reverb, vocals have like this a special presence, feeling... and rhythm is estupendo!!!! frenético!!! Muy buenacanción!!!
hey hey hey
@calafinestrat

[calafinestrat]

@moraamarolaloba
Muchas Gracias Señorita!!

[Dorian]

@calafinestrat  Great contrast between the somewhat dreamy reverb vocals and the dry guitars, especially in the quiet parts.

Could have easily fooled me by saying it was a song from the 70s punk era.

Cheers, Dorian

[calafinestrat]

@Dorian
Thanks Dorian, I've been playing around with various styles recently. Gone from Calypso and AC/DC to early green day and now working on ZZ top influenced driving song!! Got to get a life.

[Jambrains]

Rocking tune! A few suggestions, much down to personal taste, keep or sweep :-)
- The vocals needs to come up a bit in the mix during the verses and I think the reverb/processing of it is a bit too much
- The drums really needs to come forth to properly rock this thing! Perhaps consider panning the rhythm guitars left and right, that would leave some space in the middle for the drums (but they would still need to come up in the mix)

[rightly]

Quite the rocker.
I like those dynamic guitars starting with muting then ringing out.
There's like a threat in the voice.
It somehow sounds angry and young.
The photo is a bit off-putting, healthy balanced kids in denim.

The song is a fine thing, o hope not autobiographical. 
Cheers!

[CorkingCrackBand]

Hi @calafinestrat

  The song has a real drive and is well crafted. I agree with @Jambrains that the mix is quite muddy and that clearing it up a bit with panning/eq and playing with the levels could take the song to the proverbial 'next level'. Even as it is, it's a high energy fun-ride. 

All the best,

CCB

[calafinestrat]

@Jambrains
Yes you're probably right about the mixing, I should really spend longer trying to get it right. I might have another go at mixing it using your ideas. Thanks for the advice, much appreciated.

[calafinestrat]

@rightly
Glad you enjoyed it. Yes it has got an angry vibe tried to get that in the lyrics. Luckily not autobiographical. The photo was AI generated.