[Whiskey Club]

Song number 4 from me and the simplest by far.  Just a simply mixed 5 track 3 chord love song.  Dunno why It came out that way; just going with the flow rather than targeting a genre iykwim.

https://whiskey-club.co.uk/track-4

I Suppose That I love You

I’m sat on the margin, no need to explain
And I’m really not trying to be such a pain
And I don’t mean to trip you up in any way
It’s just I don’t want to leave
But I don’t want to stay

And I know that you love me
I suppose I love you too
But I’m wired to only see things
From my own point of view

I’m really just asking you, don’t close that door
Leaving me on the wrong side like I was before
And I know that at times I must darken your skies
But if you ever doubt me
Just look in my eyes

And I know I pretend not to hear what you mean
Whenever I’m trying to spoil your routine
But I think that on balance I brighten your world
I’m the grit in your oyster
That gives you the pearl

And I know that you love me
And  I suppose that I love you back
But where your world’s in colour
I see just white or black

I weave through your treasures, don’t care if they fall
To me there’s no sentiment in them at all
And when my behaviour becomes too much
I’ll be back on your pillow
And purr to your touch

And I suppose that I love you
Even though it might not show
Its just I can’t speak your language
But you still aught To know


Cheers - John.

[Whiskey Club]

And, if anyone is interested in this kind of stuff this the promo video I’ll test first:

https://www.instagram.com/reel/C2Rv4ukoLp8/?igsh=cnRrMDEzeG1uYXo3

[Elvis Nash]

Whiskey my man , My favorite person
sounds good man , Keep rocking the whiskey house

[Whiskey Club]

Whiskey my man , My favorite person
sounds good man , Keep rocking the whiskey house

Thanks so much sir!

Cheers - John.

[pompeyjazz]

Ah ! @Whiskey Club Love the simplicity of this one. This is well structured and delivered with some thoughtful touches. I like your vocal style, it's pretty unique and you're not trying to be anyone else, that's great. It's great to see your progression 

[Theresa]

I really really REALLY like the texture in the voice!

[Whiskey Club]

@Theresa @pompeyjazz Thanks so much.  Was just reflecting on your comments with my wife.  She always said I could hold a tune just hearing my singing round the house but I’ve never believed it.  Now I am arranging live versions for just me and piano! Confidence is so important in this arena.

Cheers - John.

[Nick Ryder]

There's a lot of potential in this song. Musically, it keeps the listeners interest and is in no way predictable.

I know you're near the start of your journey, John, and that you're looking to this forum for inspiration and idea's.

My advice would be to pick a commercial reference song, something in a similar style and then look at ways of replication the arrangement and production. If I were arranging this song, there is so much I can hear beyond the drums, piano, vocal etc.

[Whiskey Club]

There's a lot of potential in this song. Musically, it keeps the listeners interest and is in no way predictable.

I know you're near the start of your journey, John, and that you're looking to this forum for inspiration and idea's.

My advice would be to pick a commercial reference song, something in a similar style and then look at ways of replication the arrangement and production. If I were arranging this song, there is so much I can hear beyond the drums, piano, vocal etc.

Great feedback Nick, much appreciated. Good idea to use reference tracks for inspiration.  I’ve been guilty of being over-excited and in a rush to get something down.  Two of my songs were written, recorded and sent for distribution on the same day.  My next song was written before Christmas and I haven’t yet tried to record it.  I’m hoping the extra care will show through.

Cheers - John.

[Skub]

Hi Whiskey Club.

The song has a great 'down time' feel,as in it could be used as a quiet time in a set.

Your vocals carry the song sensitively and emotionally. Much enjoyed the listen.

[ChrisPrice]

I really like this track. The voice and the keys are great. My only doubt is the drums. You're going for a modern drumming style I can tell, but it sounds a bit too disjointed in places to my ears. Overall a terrific song though.

[Whiskey Club]

Hi Whiskey Club.

The song has a great 'down time' feel,as in it could be used as a quiet time in a set.

Your vocals carry the song sensitively and emotionally. Much enjoyed the listen.

Thanks @Skub that’s such a nice comment.  This was the first time I have been ok with my own voice so I think there’s some progress being made.

Cheers - John.

[Whiskey Club]

I really like this track. The voice and the keys are great. My only doubt is the drums. You're going for a modern drumming style I can tell, but it sounds a bit too disjointed in places to my ears. Overall a terrific song though.
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Thank you @ChrisPrice .  You put your finger right on my biggest doubt about the mix.  Those drums that bridge the verses and chorus especially.  Those sextuplets started life as an acoustic guitar figure but it sounded weak so I doubled it on piano then add a drum beat to make it pop.  It was after I distributed the song that I had the sensation that it was too sudden a transition.  Lesson learned about distributing in haste lol.

Cheers - John.

[rightly]

oh, excellent, perceptive lyrics and voice
Masterful songwriting
I can't find any hang ups with this.
A fine piece o' work. Keep them coming.

[CaliaMoko]

This has what I might call "texture"...you can get your teeth into it, metaphorically speaking. Not much to nitpick. I love the piano, especially.

If you ever want to update the song, you could consider editing one line: "Leaving me on the wrong side like I was before" -- "With me on the wrong side..." might fit into the rhythmic space better. Just a thought.

Great lyrics, really expresses the struggle going on in his mind.

Vicki