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Theresa:
Hello, excuse me, but I really need help.

I am new to music, started singing and playing guitar - by myself - almost an year ago, and been trying to write music for a few months now.

I am trying to not go to the next one until I have learned everything I can from this one. It is not good, but I feel... okay about it, but it still seems like I can learn something else from it, like it is lacking something that could help me to level up.

So that is my doubt, is it just that my skills in singing and playing and composing are very rudimentary and this is the best I can do no matter what, or am I overlooking something that to someone who is more experient it is pretty obvious, as in, for exemple, one of my ideias was maybe change the fingerstyle, make it more complex? At the same time I see plenty of good songs with a single fingerstyle being used throughout its whole lenght, sometimes simpler than this. Maybe it is the intro and outro? Or focusing on that now would be focusing on the wrong thing, like putting acessories into an unfinished outfit, as there is more pressing issues?
 
I am sorry for asking for help with something so simple, but I have nobody else to take sugestions from but the internet.

About the song:

It started as something more folk punky with strumming, but my friends said fingerstyle would fit the mood better so I changed it.

https://on.soundcloud.com/L3zGV

Here are the lyrics

Olhando pro céu imagino você
feliz sorrindo
Finalmente está em casa,
meu anjo sem asa?

Minha estrela na terra,
será que te deixam nas nuvens nadar
Quando olho pra lua   
será que vês o mesmo que eu?

Por favor, por favor
Por favor me ouça
Por favor Deus
Por favor cuide bem do que agora é seu

Olhando pro teto não durmo e me lembro
de cada momento
foi meu abraço forte o bastante
minha luz radiante

Meu raio de sol
será que eles têm brigadeiro no céu?
Quando choro no escuro
será que você escuta os soluços

Por favor, por favor
Por favor me ouça
Por favor Deus
Por favor cuide bem do que agora é seu

Espero que tenha te feito contente
Que eu disse o suficiente
que eu te amo

E meu maior medo persiste
A duvida se o depois existe
e eu choro na noite

Por favor, por favor
Por favor me ouça
Por favor Deus
Por favor cuide bem do que agora é seu

And here is the translation

Looking at the sky I imagine you
happy smiling
Are you finally home,
my wingless angel?

My star on earth,
do they let you swim in the clouds?
When I look at the moon,
do you see the same thing as I?

Please please
Please hear me
Please God
Please take good care of what is now yours

Looking at the ceiling I don't sleep and I remember
every moment
was my hug strong enough
my radiant light

My sunshine
Do they have a brigadeiro in heaven?
When I cry in the dark
do you will hear the sobs?

Please please
Please hear me
Please God
Please take good care of what is now yours

I hope I made you happy
that I said enough
that I love you

and my biggest fear persists
the doubt if the after exists
and I cry in the night

Please please
Please hear
Please God
Please take good care of what is now yours

pompeyjazz:
Hi @Theresa This is lovely, Nice acoustic picking style and very colourful vocals full of emotion. Welcome to the forum  :)

CaliaMoko:
I think this is a very good start to your songwriting journey. Your lyrics are very sweet and emotional. The best advice I can think of at the moment is for you to keep writing songs. I believe you'll find your skills develop over time as you practice them. I don't have any specific advice for this song, but you may find--after you've been writing for a while--that you want to come back and take another look at it. For an early (maybe first?) attempt, this sounds very good to me.

I recommend you spend some time browsing the forum and commenting on songs written by others. You are likely to find that the more you participate in that way, the more interaction you will enjoy going forward.

Vicki

Theresa:
Thank you so much both of you! That encorages me greatly!
Thank you @pompeyjazz I am still very self concious about my singing, learning to do it alone is very hard haha
And thank you @CaliaMoko I will do just that then, consider this done and go to the next one. Will be commenting more too, I fear not adding much, but listening to people's songs around here in the forum has been both very fun and enlightening so I will share what I think!

rightly:
Yes, like Vicki said, just keep going
And don't rush it but work hard.
Don't let frustration tire you out.
You've a lovely low register to your voice.

I don't pick on the guitar much.
I've recently been compared to the guy, the songwriter of the kinks.
He's a real innovator.
I think it's important to not impersonate or imitate.
That is at times a very bumpy road to take but eventually much more rewarding.

All the best.

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