[rightly]

I finished this in 3 days
It'll be punk rocky with a little jazzy sound to it.
I've got most of the musical ideas down.
So, I'm quite pleased with it.

I'll put it on an album I'm half way through.
It'll be titled "situationships"

Any feedback is very welcome. Thanks 🙏



the rich win the war

this is how the rich win the war
       magnifying differences,
    triggering all prejudice
 this is how the rich win the war

this is why you're destined to lose
     knowing what has been before
  while figuring there is no more
this is why we're destined to lose

these mind machinations
     way out on a limb
   they' tightening the vice
        my head caves in

this is how the pricks win the war

success will surely destroy you
     there's no other way around it
    you will leave it like you found it
success will most certainly kill you

these mind machinations
     way out on a limb
   they' tightening the vice
        my head caves in

 this is why we're destined to lose

    this is how
        the pricks win the war
     I'll tell you now,
            we are destined to lose

    _______

     Rightly

[Sterix]

Looking forward to hearing this. They do have a "punk" quality to them when the words in my head.

[adamfarr]

Quite some anger here! I'd like to hear the punk version of this. Using "profanity" (if that's the right word) is really interesting - sometimes it doesn't work or feels lazy, but if well chosen (as here) then it smacks us in the face and gets our immediate attention.

[rightly]

Looking forward to hearing this. They do have a "punk" quality to them when the words in my head.

Update   


this is how the rich win the war

this is how the rich win the war
       magnifying differences,
    triggering all prejudice
this is how the rich win the war

this is why you're destined to lose
     reflecting what’s been before
   figuring there is no more
this is why we're destined to lose
    these mind machinations
       way out on a limb
   they' tightening the vice
        my head caves in

this is how the pricks win the war

success will surely destroy you
    there's no other way around it
   you will leave it like you found it
success will certainly kill you
      these mind machinations
        way out on a limb
   they' tightening the vice
        my head caves in

this is why we're destined to lose

     they will eat you alive
   slowly, 'cause they' got no teeth
    it begins on the inside
  'till you're prayin' for release

this is how the rich win the war
   this is how the pricks win the war

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@Sterix
I've tried and failed at punk Rock before
The result was nevertheless interesting.

@adamfarr
Certainly, profanity is often misapplied
It might be something I can throw in when recording.
It works when spontaneous, I find.

[adamfarr]

I was just thinking of "pricks" - no need for more (unless you are really moved ;-))

[rightly]

I was just thinking of "pricks" - no need for more (unless you are really moved ;-))

😆
Usually, I'm desinclined to use profanity.
 But I thought that p word isn't really such a word.
I suppose you're right. I'll use it but not in a sleepy way.

[rightly]

Done!!