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Breathe Me In

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dinnerwithgreedo:
This song started as an anti-smoking song but then ended up sounding like a pro-smoking song  ::)
I've been trying to teach myself mixing and mastering and it's going badly... but here... see what you think of this?

It won't let me embed it here (i think because it's private), so...

https://on.soundcloud.com/vQLGB

Lyrics

Breathe me in
I'm here to depend on
Hold me close
Someone to rely on

When things at work are getting bad
It's the worst day you've ever had
Your boss thinks you're a real scumbag
It's been a while since your last drag

Breathe me in
Someone to rely on
Hold me close
I'm here to depend on

When things at work are getting bad
It's the worst day you've ever had
Your boss thinks you're a real scumbag
It's been a while since your last drag

pompeyjazz:
Hi @dinnerwithgreedo I always thing that your mixes are pretty damn good man  :) Love the subtle start, great in yer face vocal. It's got a great atmospheric feel to it - It quite reminded me of some Velvet Underground stuff - Well, the same vibe anyway - Great to see you back on here - A captivating track

Nick Ryder:
@dinnerwithgreedo A lovely tracks and a sublime vocal. The arrangement is great and some nice dynamics and builds.

My only comment is I thought the intro was a bit too long. I wanted to get to your vocal sooner, but that's just my opinion :)

Top work!!

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