Hi, I am new here and was just looking for some feedback on this song I made or any suggestions how to make it better etc.
I wrote this song as I felt inspired after hearing the news clip sampled at the beginning. I myself was addicted to gambling for 20 years so I am very passionate about the subject and would love to be able to help any listeners with the same problem.
I am looking for both musical and lyrical feedback as I feel like this is close to being finished but it's hard to say without anyone's opinion or advice. Thank you in advance.
https://soundcloud.com/user-586564289/stevie-itll-come-to-an-end-m4a?si=2921377307294f9bb8672db263dd4b65It'll Come To An End - Contains some strong language
Lyrics
bigger the stake
bigger the win
when it comes in
bigger the grin
when it doesn't
reality & frustration kicks in
going home to ya husband or wife
no food on the table
but ya feedin them lies
look them dead in the eyes
as you try to explain why there's no money
treating everyone you love like a dummy
all the while you got a sick feeling in ya tummy
cos you just got paid
but you damn near lost it all
said you were visiting ya gran in hospital
but she hasn't seen you for days
you can't get out of ya ways
lying about where you've been
it's like your trapped in a maze
re-tracing ya steps
making sure you don't slip up
cos when you get caught out
that's when this shits fucked
see there's no signs that comes with this addiction
no visible flaws, no nail biting, no itching
but in ya mind you can't wait for another fix and
you plot in ya head the next excuse
to cut loose, spend some time on ya own
it's pure money abuse
what's funny is that none of them knew
you become so good at lying
you didn't even know if it's true
differentiate facts & fiction
fact is ya broke from the addiction
never met a rich gambler
there probably ain't many
scrap that, there probably ain't any
cos when I was at my worst
I didn't have a penny
struggling to pay rent
struggling to pay bills
struggling to vent
struggling to say how it feels
cos if you know then you know
nothing else matters when ya caught in the zone
not thinking of loved ones
and supporting ya home
too busy trying to borrow money
cos you need some to blow
these are the facts
cos if you know then you know
nothing else matters when ya caught in the zone
time goes by the debts pile up
searching for help lines to dial up
but by then it's too late
the damage has been done
you've already sealed ya fate
partners left you, couldn't take anymore
for sale sign stuck up outside ya door
kids don't wanna know you
days away from losing ya job
back of ya mind tryin a find someone to rob
cos it's all got to much and you can't take it
need to hard or go home when you stake it
you mistake this as an opportunity change ya life
if you just win big it'll make it all right
but ya wrong
it's the whole reason for this song
there's no quick fix to it it's a long
road you'll be facing but I promise when you get to the end
it's all worth it
just accept that no ones wants you to be perfect
just get the help you need and support of ya friends
build up some trust make bridges again
be open about your problem
and I promise, it'll come to an end