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rightly:

My latest production
Another one where I was quite doubtful it'd work out
I think it did in the end

Feedback would be thrilling


link:

https://soundcloud.com/2rightly/i-look-see-horizon

Lyrics:



i look see horizon

in the year of death
did I not live alone?
there I found your sweetness
now I just want you to know
I look see horizon
as near as it can be
I just close my eyes and
it’s like you’re here with me
_____
I look see horizon
_____
when this war is over
before the next begins
if I get to hold you
it matters less who wins
_____
I look see horizon
_____
well, that would be my luck
to give a fuck then t' fall
for one who leaves me wanting
when I would have it all
‘goes around, comes around
y’know that’s what they say
furthermore if not now
I'll get mine someday
_____
I look see horizon
_____
when this war is over
before the next begins
if i get to hold you
it matters not who wins
_____
I look see horizon
I look see horizon
_____
will I get to know you?
when this war is over
______________

Rightly

ChrisPrice:
More than a hint of psychedelia. For The Benefit of Mr Kite sprung to mind at the start. There's some incredible stuff happening here. I like the way the piano kind of plays a melody and yet wanders out of key here and there - not in a bad way - it adds to whole vibe. The vocal is you doing what you do..I don't understand the lyrics but I don't think that matters. I look forward to your songs because they're unique and that's not so easy these days. Well done mate, I really enjoyed this. :)

moraamarolaloba:
Hola @rightly
Buenas noches!

The backing has puzzled me, especially at the beginning, your musical vibe is so particular that I have to adapt to its language ... And then everything goes well. As always the lyrics are stupendous. Strange horizon.

Stay well

Mora

IronKnee:
Love the chaos behind the lyrics. Immediately grabs the attention. This is sorta a psychedelic dream.

Good stuff!
                       -T

MonnoDB:
It's like a circus act.. not sure why I'm saying that but it has that mood.. I love the harp glissandos (is that what I'm hearing???).

Lyrics as always completely intriguing.. wonderful in fact..

What a ride... many listens in I know I have many more to come..

You're amazing @rightly

K

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