Hi, long time no see. Apologies. Been busy and stuff.
Anyway.
I wrote a song the other day and I'm not 100% on it. It's on a topic that I've been trying to write about for the longest time and this is the first time I feel like I've kinda got it. But at the same time, I don't love the generic chords and melody and I suppose just would like some feedback/reassurance on it. I also don't love the bridge but putting it out there for thoughts.
I think a lot could be improved with a decent production, I've put in brackets lyrics I plan to add in on production.
Here's a link:
https://soundcloud.com/hazukisongs/we-were/s-pmon6n5PFA9?si=a7450a287ef3477bbaf201bcefb481cfLyrics:
It was September 06 when we first clicked
We used to be enemies
It was the fall, and I can't recall why
But we became best friends - super-glued-throughout-all-time best friends
You got me into trouble, my parents didn't like you oh
But I remember how
You were there for me
First time I cried down the phone and
I never thought you would leave
We were in trouble for everything
We were together in anything
You were meant to tell me about your first boyfriend
I was meant to tell you that I wanted a girlfriend
We were friends
We were
Keeping afloat on opposite sides of the moat
I tried to make us plans
But guess who never turned up (she!)
Guess who got stood up (me!)
I had no one else, I know that you know that
And I was always depressed and alone
So how could you let me drown?
You always let me down
We were in trouble for everything
We were together in anything
You were meant to tell me about your first boyfriend
I was meant to tell you that I wanted a girlfriend
You were never reliable
I can't believe that I tried so hard
To keep us together
I thought we were better
Sometimes I reminisce
And wonder what you're doing now
I wana know if you think of me
I'll admit it gets easier
But can't deny that it never hurt
But despite all the pain, I miss you