[Jamie]

@rightly

Hi, this is one of your more conventional arrangements and constructions, but that doesn't mean its conventional. . I liked the instrumentation and the drums, it all hangs together very nicely. Unambiguously you, and all the better for that!

Nice one!

Cheers

Jamie

[rightly]

Hi @rightly , that’s quite an alternative ballad, almost anthemic with its distinctive melody. The instrumentation is great, but yeah the heroes need to be turned up in the breaks.

That couplet beginning ‘brighter lights are found...’ to me establishes itself immediately as the chorus. Being more conventional than you I would have used that two or three times in the song. But you are you! 😀

Really like this one, great atmosphere and easily remembered too.

thanks @MichaelA
I'm not looking to improve the arrangement
I didn't want the pop song arrangement, or anything in that direction.
Still I appreciate your suggestion and took it into consideration,

Thanks for commenting

[CaliaMoko]

I don't have any criticism, destructive or constructive. I like it the way it is. I'll get in line with those who like the level of echo you have. In my opinion, it suits it.

[adamfarr]

Very nice backing - gives the impression of a musical box going round...
I think this could be done with a dry intimate vocal (ala Leonard Cohen??) for a confessional style, or with the vocal processing you go for - a more helpless style. It's all good - which must mean it's a good song. I always like your more melodic pieces and this is one of those.

[Unclenny]

Wait! You didn't want a pop song??!! 

You keep taking what you do to new levels....and what you do is so perfectly unique. I agree completely with @pompeyjazz about the excellent and bold use of reverb on these vocals.

I also agree with @crystalsuzy about the wonderful juxtaposition between the otherwoldy feel of the song and the distinctly down to earth lyrics.

This is a good one for you....up there among your best.

[The Holographic Rodeo]

Great distinctive melody, and brilliant vocal performance. Really enjoyed this.

[rightly]

Wait! You didn't want a pop song??!! 

You keep taking what you do to new levels....and what you do is so perfectly unique. I agree completely with @pompeyjazz about the excellent and bold use of reverb on these vocals.

I also agree with @crystalsuzy about the wonderful juxtaposition between the otherwoldy feel of the song and the distinctly down to earth lyrics.

This is a good one for you....up there among your best.

I wasn't at all sure about the reverb
I think my might have taken to vocals a little too early
With emotion I tend to forget the predetermined n' go off a bit.
I really do like the song though, it's a blast on acoustic.

[PaulAds]

Yikes...another harp!

Superb use of words. You perhaps use paper and pen, but you should really consider replacing those with a hammer+chisel and tablets of stone just in case there's a fire or something on RightlyStrasse.

Excellent!

[rightly]

Yikes...another harp!

Superb use of words. You perhaps use paper and pen, but you should really consider replacing those with a hammer+chisel and tablets of stone just in case there's a fire or something on RightlyStrasse.

Excellent!

lol. I'm actually worried about losing material, my laptop misbehaves a good bit.
I need to get around to making back ups

Thanks for commenting paul!

[IronKnee]

I tell you what.............there is an inner Dylon in your words. Your writing is distinct, different, and on the edge of something always very profound. At least, that's the path your lyrics take me.....your melody and singing, arrangements and mixes, support that bold claim of yours.
Keeps me tuning in!!
Good stuff!
                                 -Tom

[fischermans]

Hello Rightly like the way you sing this and how you use very sparingly some instruments to build a own atmosphere to your song. Well done.

[Unclenny]

I'm back for a replay of this classic Rightly tune. The way you string your thoughts together into lyrics always makes me listen even more closely.

[rightly]

I tell you what.............there is an inner Dylon in your words. Your writing is distinct, different, and on the edge of something always very profound. At least, that's the path your lyrics take me.....your melody and singing, arrangements and mixes, support that bold claim of yours.
Keeps me tuning in!!
Good stuff!
                                 -Tom

hey Tom
I'm really glad you like the song, and I appreciate you expressing your thoughts.
but I really don't know if I made a bold claim of late,
I'm not saying I didn't, just can't remember making a bold claim.