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(Is there?) A noise in your head

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Jamie

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« Reply #15 on: January 14, 2021, 05:49:22 PM »
Hi Thanks for listening!

@Unclenny
Hi, glad you mentioned the vocals I spent a lot of time on them, more than usual. Please it got 'into' your head!

@Holographic Rodeo

Hi, Great comments, thanks glad you got something from it!

@PaulAds

Hi Paul, me old mate!  ;) Good to hear from you! Fab comments, have a another slice.....its free ;) Glad you enjoyed it.

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« Reply #16 on: January 16, 2021, 04:34:11 PM »
One of your best I think....
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« Reply #17 on: January 17, 2021, 02:38:45 AM »
You sure can *do* stuff. I only noticed one thing I might suggest. The first verse has this line: "You feel the weight of despair, as it's crushing you". I was expecting to hear the word "crushing" emphasized because, you know, the WEIGHT of despair knocked it down so hard....  As someone mentioned, your voice sounded a little buried in the mix, but it was still easy to hear you. Mostly I feel like I shouldn't criticize at all because it's so much better than anything I could put together on my own.

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« Reply #18 on: January 17, 2021, 10:30:21 AM »
Hi Jamie - this great and really poppy - I can hear some more “indie” style elements here too especially in the bass and guitars which I really like. Love the jump up to the final note of the verse, great choice. The “non-guitar solo” is cool too, a great contrast from the busier verses. Excellent all through!

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« Reply #19 on: January 17, 2021, 09:48:42 PM »
Like it, reminds me of OMD, nice production and whimsical feel to the vocals.

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« Reply #20 on: January 18, 2021, 01:43:09 PM »
Hi all, thanks for listening!

@shadowfax

Hi Kevin, thank you It's appreciated.

@CaliaMoko

Hi Vicki, every days a school day. I'm learning every time I sit down to record something, mostly trial and error (more error), and of course some great tips and ideas from the recording ninjas on this forum! Just keep at it, it's the only way to improve. Take the points about lyrics and vocal mix, as I said, still learning!

@adamfarr

Hi Adam, yes there is a touch of pop in there, unusual for me to be slightly upbeat and optimistic ;), although the lyrics are still dark ;D. Thanks for listening!

@Sullish
Hi, I get the OMD thing, thanks for the comment on the production, glad you got something from it!

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« Reply #21 on: January 18, 2021, 05:31:19 PM »
Thanks for making a cool noise in my ears!

I thought the track was great all round - although I wasn't paying much attention to the lyrics. Nicely produced, bags of feel and groove, and a really credible vocal melody with a performance to match.

Just enough movement in the arrangement to hold my interest and signpost the different sections of the song without ever overcrowding it. Always something new happening, but the feeling of space persists throughout.
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« Reply #22 on: January 21, 2021, 01:55:52 PM »
@tone

Hi, it was my pleasure, lovely comments, although my thin skin bristled at 'credible' melody ;) ;D. Cool comments, appreciated!


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« Reply #23 on: January 21, 2021, 03:36:55 PM »
my thin skin bristled at 'credible' melody ;) ;D.

Ah sorry! It probably wasn't a brilliant choice of words, but it was absolutely intended as a compliment. It's a good and appropriate melody for the genre and the lyrics. I enjoyed it! :)
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« Reply #24 on: January 21, 2021, 06:57:37 PM »
excellent production
and a relatable theme
like those effects
Nice work!
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« Reply #25 on: January 22, 2021, 09:58:10 AM »
Interesting melody.  Great vocals.
I would lessen the stereo in the intro, just a little bit. 
I also noticed that if I listen with headphones, I feel dizzy because of the panning. :)

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« Reply #26 on: January 22, 2021, 01:09:55 PM »
Great soundscape.. particularly like those synths... and the instrumental break.. Polished and interesting as always.. Another vote for some harms on the chorus - not that it's not fab as is, but I think that would make it moreso... Love how you take it out..

Great to hear a new one from you @Jamie

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« Reply #27 on: January 23, 2021, 04:03:00 AM »
I love the atmosphere that you created. The sound is great.
Your vocal reminds me of Pete Townsend (The Who). Pretty cool.
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« Reply #28 on: January 23, 2021, 10:42:46 AM »
I enjoyed this song very much! Love the way the melody progresses, especially when "you're on your own" very nice and special. I agree with some of the other people who have posted. The synth layering is great, but there may be some buildup in the 2-8k range which (for me) makes the vocals hard to discern at some points. But overall this is sounding just great!