(Is there?) A noise in your head

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« on: January 06, 2021, 05:24:25 PM »
Hi all, been away for a bit contemplating my navel. Now that all the partying and socialising over the holidays is finished  ::) I can get back to stuff! Let's hope 2021 is going to be better, but the current signs aren't too great......

Got a bit lost doing this one, but finally got round to finishing it. Look forward to your usual informative and constructive criticism!


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(Is there?) A noise in your head


When alarm bell are ringing, is there a noise in your head
If your head jar keep spinning, are you better off dead
You feel the weight of despair, as it's crushing you
It's like you're trapped in a cage, can't see a way through

There's  cathode ray blinking, is there a noise in your head
And with a gun in your hand, are you better off dead
That's the fall of their footsteps, still following you
Hear the sound of ice cracking, so cold and so blue

You spent all these years so close to the edge
What if you fall as you stand on the ledge

So what else can you prove when, there's a noise in your head
And what else can you do when, you're better of dead
Everything that you touch turns cotton wool into stone
you're on a runaway train, and you're on your own

You spent all these years so close to the edge
What if you fall as you stand on the ledge
And why does it have to be so intense
Who else can see what you're up against


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« Reply #1 on: January 06, 2021, 07:11:46 PM »
Really cool sounds and production on this, like the melody and there’s some great drum fills, you’ve got some great range on your vocals👌 I think if you could do some treatment (chorus or double tracking?) on the vocals in the ‘ You spent all these years so close to the edge’ part, it will really help it pop and stand out as the main hook, then that’ll just finish it off👌
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« Reply #2 on: January 07, 2021, 05:02:51 PM »
Hi @Jamie
Long time no hear so it's nice to see something new from you. I agree with MMM, some double tracked or harmony vocals would help with the hook. I like the musical stage that you've set here and your vocals and arrangement are well up to your usual standards. I'm not sure what the song is about and the melody is a little unadventurous but that said, it's still a quality piece of work.
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« Reply #3 on: January 07, 2021, 08:08:19 PM »
Very good song, full of rhythm and great lyrics. I enjoyed the entire box!!!! The FX has a really special atmosphere...
May be the mix has too much high? or there is my headphones??

Very good track.

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« Reply #4 on: January 07, 2021, 11:19:34 PM »
I really like this one Jamie.
Good hook and you revisit it just the right number of times for my liking.
Awesome vocals and the synth creates a dreamy soundscape that washes over me.
Do you plan all those dischordant notes in the synth or just dial them up?
No matter - it works great anyway  :D

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« Reply #5 on: January 08, 2021, 12:26:46 AM »
I can't fault this. It's really catchy with some great synth sounds which make it very atmospheric. I like the electronic stuff but I also like that you've gone for a real sounding kit which drives it along nicely. Excellent :)

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« Reply #6 on: January 09, 2021, 07:14:20 PM »
Fabulous @Jamie More pop rock than prog rock this time. I was waiting for that switch into 7/8 timing. Seriously though, great catchy tune with super melody and great playing. A very enjoyable listen

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« Reply #7 on: January 09, 2021, 09:32:31 PM »
I love the way this tune washes through me ....listening on good headphones. It's an excellent noise in my head.

I like where the vocals are in the mix a lot.
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« Reply #8 on: January 10, 2021, 02:02:34 PM »
Great track - love the sound of that distorted bass, and the tension between the bright and upbeat vocal sound and melody vs the darkness of the lyrical content. Good production overall, though I feel like the vocals could do with sticking out from the mix just a tiny bit more, though that could be just a taste thing.

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« Reply #9 on: January 11, 2021, 07:14:18 PM »
I never hear anything less than excellence from you, Jamie...you're still knocking out these top tunes month after month, year after year...every one is unique and yet they still somehow feel like I'm bumping into an old friend...which in a way, I am  :)

Loved following the storyline...and I thought the soundscape was really brilliant! Vocals ice the cake as well...so much so, I had to go back and have another slice!

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« Reply #10 on: January 12, 2021, 04:44:53 PM »
Hi all thanks for taking the time to listen!

@man made material

Hi, I took a lot of time over the production on this one, more than usual, especially on the vocals and drums. There is some double tracking on the vocals and some very subtle harmonies
,maybe i need to 'beef them up'. Thanks for the comment on the vocals, that's where my range is! Pleased you got something from it!

@montydog

Hi Alan, Thanks for your kind words. Earlier versions had a more ambitious melody but I dialled it back to 'fit' the song.... :P.

@moraamarolaloba

Hi Mora, glad you enjoyed it! In the instrumental section there are some very high frequencies and I dialled them back a bit, but I wanted the 'edginess' so I didn't take them out, if that's what you mean?

Thanks again!

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« Reply #11 on: January 13, 2021, 11:39:18 AM »
"Hi Mora, glad you enjoyed it! In the instrumental section there are some very high frequencies and I dialled them back a bit, but I wanted the 'edginess' so I didn't take them out, if that's what you mean?"

@Jamie that is what I mean.

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« Reply #12 on: January 13, 2021, 12:45:24 PM »
@Jamie

I instantly like those keys set against the driving bass.  It feels as if this is awash with reverb as an listen through my headphones.  Great at times but I would use effects sparingly despite the ambience that's they can create.  Loving the section 'You spend all the years". 

Much to like here Andy good to see you back on the forum.

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« Reply #13 on: January 14, 2021, 05:37:21 PM »
Hi Jamie, seems quite a while since we heard one of yours. The bass line really motors this from the start and it’s far more poppy than I thought it would be, albeit darker pop. I think you could add something to the chorus with a minor tweak to vocals, either harmonies, octave vocal or even shadowing the vocal with a synth - only because the verse is so well layered you need a bigger punch maybe in the chorus. But lots of imagination in your instrumental progressions and choice of sounds, really nice to hear that Jamie magic once again  :D
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« Reply #14 on: January 14, 2021, 05:42:34 PM »
Hi, thanks for listening!

@Paulski
Hi Paul, what discordant notes..... ;D? I rarely use 'standard' major and minor chords, there are usually a smattering of 11ths/13ths/flat 5ths, major 9ths etc etc. I think the most complex sounds are in the instrumental part where I sang through various guitar effects and pedals to get the sound. I think it's quite atmospheric :P. Glad you enjoyed it!

@ChrisPrice
Hi, glad you got the atmosphere, and I did spend quite a lot more time than usual getting drum sounds that contrasted with the synth sounds. Thanks for the comments, it's appreciated!

@pompeyjazz

Hi John, Yes, was looking for a simpler sound this time, no big key changes or complex time signatures! Glad you enjoyed it!

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Jamie