Wow, fab stuff. I knew from your introduction I was going to have to put the bass away, but now I may need to put the vocals, guitars, harmonies, drumming, melody-writing, lyric-writing and production away too.
Everything sounding really good. Great vocal and that breakdown works especially well.
So nearly there I reckon. I might tame down the hi hats a little; and possibly try to lose a syllable from "a girl so out of my league" so it fits more smoothly - but it's a great entrance to the forum if you ask me.