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New lyric -- Sloooooow Poison

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« on: November 07, 2020, 07:10:50 AM »
                           SLOW POISON

She’s slooooow poison, but I’m in no hurry. 
There’s a blizzard of lies and I’m stuck in a flurry. 
I’m on trial for my life, praying for a hung jury,
But I ain’t the type to whine or to worry. 

I’ve been easily frightened before. 
I don’t want to be afraid any more. 
I’ll just try to hang on for a little bit longer,
Cause what doesn’t kill me can only  ----  make me stronger.
They say what doesn’t kill you  -----------  makes you stronger.

She’s sloooooow poison, but I don’t care. 
Being timid and lonely never got me nowhere. 
She’s sloooooow poison, but I’ll take the chance. 
Oh, the things that we do for a little romance. 

You know I’ve been lonely before. 
I don’t wanna be lonely no more. 
So, I’ll try to hang on for a little bit longer.
It probably won’t kill me, And it just might ----- make me stronger. 
They say what doesn’t kill you    –--------  makes you stronger. 

She’s slooooooow poison when you get down to it. 
I’ll probably look back on this and say that I blew it,
I know that it’s wrong, but I’m still gonna do it. 
It’s gonna be tough, but I’ll probably get through it.

Cause I’ve been down here before.
I know I ought to walk out that door. 
But I’ll try to hang on for a little bit longer,
It probably won’t kill me, and it might not even      –-------    make me stronger.   
They Some say what doesn’t kill you    –--------    makes you stronger.

I'm getting real dizzy as I circle the drain. 
I’ve got so much to lose.  I’ve got nothing to gain.
Am I full on crazy, or a little insane?
I've been hunting a heartache and I'm headed for pain.
 
I ought to make a run for the door. 
Before I end up bleeding out on the floor. 
I shouldn’t hang on for a little bit longer.
It’s not gonna kill me and it’s never gonna      --------     make me stronger.
The say Who Says what doesn’t kill you   –------    makes you stronger. 


In this lyric, I attempted to capture a situation we've all found familiar.  What our intrepid protagonist/singer/narrator WANTS to do, is the opposite of what he knows he NEEDS to do.  And as he's trying to talk himself in to what he wants to do, he only succeeds in making it clearer that it's a bad idea.  Let me know if that all came through, and if it's in any way compelling.
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« Reply #1 on: November 13, 2020, 07:42:34 PM »
yes I'm familiar with this concept

my favourite verses would be
1 and 4

I never liked this Nietzsche phrase
What's doesn't kill you, tends to leave you weakened in truth
He had a troubled run
It's either this or that, then again it might be the other. 

I can promise you a future of slow decline.

Don't eat the yellow snow

And there you have it. 

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« Reply #2 on: November 16, 2020, 05:08:17 PM »
yes I'm familiar with this concept

my favourite verses would be
1 and 4

I never liked this Nietzsche phrase
What's doesn't kill you, tends to leave you weakened in truth
He had a troubled run

Thank you for responding and providing meaningful input. 

Nietsche's version is more realistic, but it would never make a song.  'o)

And I wondered about some "addition by subtraction" in which one of those two weaker verses might disappear.  Any thoughts on that?
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« Reply #3 on: November 20, 2020, 12:35:34 AM »
"circle the drain"...best line in my opinion. Love it. How many times have I tried (and succeeded) to talk myself into something I KNOW is a bad idea....???

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« Reply #4 on: December 04, 2020, 05:09:05 AM »
"circle the drain"...best line in my opinion. Love it. How many times have I tried (and succeeded) to talk myself into something I KNOW is a bad idea....???

I just realized I never thanked you for your input.  The line you liked was the absolute last line written.  It was an afterthought based primarily on needing a rhyme.  Sometimes it works like that.
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