[PopTodd]

That's not just clickbait, that is actually what I am calling this song, I think.
It's my first song in a really long time and this was one of my first times playing it.
Still needs a little work: a couple of lyrical tweaks (some of the rhymes are way cliche), and I have some other ideas for the arrangement, beyond just guitar and voice.
But I think it's close enough to share at this point.
Looking forward to hearing your thoughts.
Thanks.

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1.
You’ve never looked out for yourself
You never cared about your health
You think you’re running out of time
But don’t despair, I’ll share what’s mine
Just in case you couldn’t tell
I love you more than I love myself

2.
You never want to leave your bed
You have me drag you ‘round instead
Now I can barely stand up straight
You don’t believe I deserve this fate
But in case you couldn’t tell
I love you more I love myself

(bridge)

3.
Life’s been nothing but unfair
And if it ends you just don’t care
You think you’ve cost me way too much
That you’re not worth what I’ve given up
But in case you couldn’t tell
I love you more than you hate yourself

[Melina]

Very straight-forward, simple and sweet! That age-old turmoil of getting dragged down trying to help someone stand up is all too familiar to so many people.
"But don’t despair, I’ll share what’s mine", I really like that internal rhyme of despair and share. Which are the rhymes do you think are too cliche? Have you made any changes to this since posting?

[PopTodd]

Very straight-forward, simple and sweet! That age-old turmoil of getting dragged down trying to help someone stand up is all too familiar to so many people.
"But don’t despair, I’ll share what’s mine", I really like that internal rhyme of despair and share. Which are the rhymes do you think are too cliche? Have you made any changes to this since posting?

Thanks so much, Melina!

The cliche stuff:
"Never cared about yourself"
"Running out of time"
"...deserve this fate"

Just don't sit well with me. I'll work through them and see what I can come up with.

I really appreciate your ear and your time.

And, I have not made any changes since posting. I've looked at it, but not really sat down with it and worked it.
Thanks again for listening and taking the time to comment!