MY SUGGESTIONS:
MISSISSIPPI MOON
"Come with me he said; let’s go down to Mississippi."
His eyes were bright; his smile tight with hope This sounds awkward - too many syllables, but I don't know your music, so it might not be.
"You can even leave me when we get there.
I just need someone to help me go."
He said, "If I don’t go now," he said I never will.
I’ll have a wife, some kids, an office key.
My hopes and dreams will never be fulfilled.
I really want to go, come with me please."
CHORUS
Let’s go down to Mississippi;
Watch the stars at night and maybe sing some tunes
Let’s go down to Mississippi,
Where We can sleep beneath the Mississippi Moon
I shook my head; "What would my mama say?
If I took off and ran away with you?
And what about your bride, your wedding day?
And I just really have to stay in school.
He said "If I don’t go now," he said, I never will.
I’ll have a wife, some kids, an office key.
My hopes and dreams will never be fulfilled.
I really want to go, come with me please."
CHORUS
BRIDGE MAYBE?
I can't help but wonder
how would my life have been
If I had dropped everything that day so long ago
If I had run away with him
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I too want to know "why Mississippi." I've lived in Mississippi, and it's really not viewed by many as a place of possibilities and opportunities. Not often seen as a place to 'run to,' without a plan or a darned good reason.
The place of opportunity isn't in that region isn't 'down TO Mississippi,' it's 'Down THE Mississippi,' in New Orleans. Still the Mississippi Moon, and only a few words would have to change. Right now, unless I know what opportunity awaits this guy in Mississippi that he can't face alone, it doesn't 'ring true' to me. All the reasons I can think of that fit the 'run away to Mississippi' concept wouldn't need someone to go along. "Back to Mississippi" might work, but he wouldn't need company to do that. A job or other concrete opportunity awaiting him? Still something he can do alone.