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A Rolex And A Lighter (Updated)

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« on: August 04, 2020, 07:58:51 PM »
Hmmm, Jambrains goes unplugged? Strange times..  8)
This was not planned but during the work with the full production version (coming later, stay tuned  ;D )  I realised that an unplugged version might actually work and since I've only done one (for the bare bones competition years ago) I figured I'd give it a try.
All input welcome, I'm way outside my comfort zon...



2/9: Here is the link to the more produced version, not much added but I think it actually works even better than the 1+1?
https://soundcloud.com/jambrains/a-rolex-and-a-lighter/s-Y8Ct9VSepSa



A Rolex and a lighter
That's all I got to keep
The watch was just a copy
and the lighter it was cheap
The pawnshop had his wedding ring
The bailiff had his Jeep
and I was told that he died peacefully
in his sleep

A Rolex and a lighter
and the shirt upon his back
I looked around but saw
that there was nothing more to pack
He'll travel light to heaven
I'm not sure they'll let him in
But if they send him off to hell
at least it's somewhere
he has been

Let me sit by him in silence
The way we used to do
Let me go to secret places
Only my father and I knew
Let me sit by him in silence
To clear the fog out of my head
and try to face the fact
that he is dead

A Rolex and a lighter
the two things he did not sell
The watch a fake, the lighter cheap
He knew that very well
I bought them for his birthday
when I was still a kid
I worked the docks that summer
And I saved up
every quid

Let me sit by him in silence
The way we used to do
Let me go to secret places
Only my father and I knew
Let me sit by him in silence
To clear the fog out of my head
and try to face the fact
that he is dead

We began to drift apart
the year my mother passed away
She’d held them both together
His grief led him astray
I lost him to the bottle
To the whiskey in the jar
I tried to pull him back
But he’d
gone too far

A Rolex and a lighter
that I bought at Joe's Bazaar
Because he was my hero
My childhood superstar
Taught me how to ride a bike
And let me drive his car
He raised me and my brothers
To believe in
who we are

Let me sit by him in silence
The way we used to do
Let me go to secret places
Only my father and I knew
Let me sit by him in silence
To clear the fog out of my head
and try to face the fact
that he is dead
« Last Edit: September 03, 2020, 02:30:00 AM by Jambrains »

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« Reply #1 on: August 04, 2020, 11:01:26 PM »
@jambrains goodness this is excellent...lots of space and passion, i can feel it in every strum, matched with your vocal delivery.

Forget the fuller production....My favourite since I can change

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« Reply #2 on: August 05, 2020, 09:17:03 PM »
Fabulous stuff Mr @Jambrains As Rich says, loads of space. Those distinctive vocals and lovely acoustic guitar tone. Juts perfect as it is :)

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« Reply #3 on: August 06, 2020, 09:03:29 PM »
The lyrics are truly fantastic, they really tell the story succinctly and without sentimentality, great job.

Also, agree that this works really well as an acoustic piece and it might lose some of the impact with a fuller production.

Top class ( and right up there with your  Shane McGowan song, still a favorite of mine!)

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« Reply #4 on: August 06, 2020, 09:42:05 PM »
Hi @Jambrains
Great acoustic playing, fabulous vocal delivery and a very sad personal lyric all wrapped up in a spacious pristine production, I liked it very much.

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« Reply #5 on: August 07, 2020, 01:12:24 AM »
Loved it!  The acoustic recording was perfect, the chords rang through so cleanly, and such a story.   

I'm with CPM, a full version is simply not needed, how could you improve it?

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« Reply #6 on: August 07, 2020, 07:52:02 PM »
Wonderful description, this line has impressed me
But if they send him off to hell
at least it's somewhere

It says so many things.

And I love the chorus, it's catchy and goes well in the ear
It's curious, such a deep song wrapped in a candy paper @Jambrains
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« Reply #7 on: August 07, 2020, 10:12:24 PM »
@Jambrains,  a  cool acoustic sound.  Please share the secret of how you recorded it.  This one has real movement. What I mean is the acoustic and rhythm bring the song to life.  It's instantly catchy too.  Well done with the writing and recording.

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« Reply #8 on: August 08, 2020, 03:49:37 AM »
WOW.....  This pushes every button.  The emotional button is especially "pushed", but the intellectual, and artistic buttons are no less in play.  Not much more to say than "WOW."   

I presume this is particularly personal for you, and if it is, I'm sorry for your loss. 
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« Reply #9 on: August 12, 2020, 03:23:38 AM »
@cowparsleyman: Wow, thanks pal! Amazing someone still remember I Can Change!!  :)

@pompeyjazz: thanks, you are too kind!  :)

@kevysc: thanks a mill! Think I'll do the full production nevertheless, why have one when you can have two?  8)

@Grubstar: thank you for the kind words  :)

@PeteS: thanks!!!

@moraamarolaloba: thanks you. "a deep song wrapped in a candy paper" is a fantastic way to describe it!

@Wicked Deeds: thanks!

@hardtwistmusic: thanks my friend. No worries, the whole thing is just a work of fiction.



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« Reply #10 on: August 12, 2020, 06:45:02 PM »
Nice to hear you unplugged @Jambrains . I have to say, though, that the acoustic guitar tone feels a bit brittle to my ears. Great playing, wonderfully rich vocals and a story that resonates.

I agree with @kevysc .... my favorite of yours is still The Curse of Shane McGowan.
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« Reply #11 on: August 13, 2020, 02:39:01 AM »
Suits you down to the ground, I'd say...doesn't really need anything else.

Great lyric and super chord work...I love the way you left it hanging there too...very cool!

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« Reply #12 on: August 15, 2020, 12:08:46 AM »
Neat title,
Unplugged, why not? 
The format makes you listen to the story more than normally, and there's a story here.
Guitar sounds great.
And lots to like here.
Any more planned in this format?
:-)
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« Reply #13 on: August 15, 2020, 12:15:44 AM »
Holy sh!t this is good 🤣

The verses really support the chorus which is off the radar melodic and catchy - great lyrics too.

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« Reply #14 on: August 16, 2020, 11:04:43 PM »
@Jambrains

Hi, keep it as it is.... love the 'air' in the production and the acoustic guitar sound.Very good sir!


Cheers

Jamie