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« on: July 01, 2020, 03:52:56 PM »
Hello again,

A new song which is something a little different from my usual stuff. It's kind of a darkly humorous take on the old murder ballad theme. All feedback good and bad welcome. Hope you enjoy it.

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My friends warned me but I didn't listen
They said your old lady's been messin' around
With a guy in a black station wagon
He lives on the wrong side of town
He lives on the wrong side of town

They were seen in a bar on Tuesday
On Wednesday in the back of his car
By Thursday they were sat on his back porch
It was the weekend that pushed me too far
It was the weekend that pushed me too far

He drove a black station wagon
He had a black evil heart
And when I saw them together
Man it tore me apart
Yeah it tore me apart

Fresh turned earth in a wood in Wisconsin
Posters and appeals on TV
A couple that's just gone missing
It has nothing to do with me
It has nothing to do with me

May be they're on a beach in Belize
Or cruising the Mediterranean
I for one will be very surprised
If they ever show up again

So take heed all you sneakers and cheaters
One day you will have to pay
What seems like fun on a Monday
Could turn out a different way
Yeah it could turn out a different way

He drove a black station wagon
He had a black evil heart
They don't spend too much time together
Being dead it keeps them apart
Being dead it keeps them apart.

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« Reply #1 on: July 01, 2020, 04:39:00 PM »
I like this tune a lot. It's a classic story that is well told with great instrumentation and good dynamic production choices.

I like where you go at 1:56 and I love the short instrumental that comes shortly after.

Just a great song all around with a chorus that sticks. Chuckling at the lyrical twist in the last chorus.
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« Reply #2 on: July 01, 2020, 04:54:26 PM »
Alan,
Love the bluesy feel to this, I just flows along with the bass and drums providing a cool shuffled platform for your storytelling and vocals.
Cool guitar and sax solo.
Lots to like here.
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« Reply #3 on: July 02, 2020, 08:50:28 AM »
I loved this! I think your more baritone-tone here suits the darker theme, and the jaunty backing sets off it so well.

Lots of lyrical clues as to what's to happen - which we might not get on the first listen but on the second all point to the inevitable conclusion.

Minor criticism - I think the word Mediterranean could be phrased differently, it sounded forced and spoilt that part a bit for me ("Mediterranean sea" might scan better and the loss of the end rhyme wouldn't be noticed I don't think).

But small beans, the overall effect is fabulous, great story and great listen.

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« Reply #4 on: July 02, 2020, 12:31:14 PM »
Alan, a great bluesy feel here, lovely standout guitar. Tongue in cheek lyric tells the story exceptionally well which is the other standout, also fits the blues so well. I think I agree 'Mediterranean' sounds a little clumsy but that's a very minor point and overall this is great fun to listen to. Geoff

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« Reply #5 on: July 02, 2020, 12:43:06 PM »
Quality stuff again.
No knits from me.

My favourite line has to be.

It was the weekend that pushed me too far



Great.
It's either this or that, then again it might be the other. 

I can promise you a future of slow decline.

Don't eat the yellow snow

And there you have it. 

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« Reply #6 on: July 02, 2020, 02:05:43 PM »
A perfect classic!!!!

I like how you describe though the lyrics that story @montydog
A very pleasant and elegant track!! The organ sounds great as well as the wind instruments!!
« Last Edit: July 02, 2020, 02:09:22 PM by moraamarolaloba »
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« Reply #7 on: July 03, 2020, 08:22:45 AM »
@montydog - Love this one, I just imagined walking into a blues bar, and your band was playing this, just like old times, all smokey, hot and the smell of beer, lovely slide guitar. Nothing to add except would love to play the solo on this.

Has a bit of Van the Man in it...

Doesn't sound the same "He drove a Vauxhall Viva 1.6L Estate" does it?


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« Reply #8 on: July 03, 2020, 02:48:27 PM »
Great song Alan, definite laid back bluesy feel.

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« Reply #9 on: July 03, 2020, 04:51:15 PM »
Nicely done! Rhythm flows with a nice shuffle, lead guitar & sax are fitting great
here. As mentioned your baritone suits the theme & story perfectly, I dig it :)

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« Reply #10 on: July 04, 2020, 05:08:22 PM »
Hi Alan,

This would be a perfect vehicle for Dave Lee Roth in his Eat Em And Smile days.
I think he'd groove big time on this. Sort of like Just A Gigolo.

Loving the delivery.
That bass is just great.
The solo in to sax works perfectly - I'd have been tempted with a little more lead sax.

Cool lyrics. A cracking tune.

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« Reply #11 on: July 04, 2020, 08:52:14 PM »
I thought this was fabulous Alan. Really enjoyed the jazzy vibe .The keys underpinning it are great and it's spot on for your vocals which are sounding mighty fine. Top work all around

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« Reply #12 on: July 05, 2020, 10:57:44 AM »
Hi Alan I like the dark humour to this and the use of the 'unreliable narrator' who claims innocence. It's funny in songs or fiction, you feel sorry for, in this instance, the protagonist as the evil guy has stolen his missus. Then you realise that he's killed them and this seems quite reasonable in the circumstances  ;D quite unlike real life, of course, so you pull off this fictional trick with aplomb. Makes it all very entertaining.

The jaunty blues influenced backing track has a slight dark edge to it, but at the same time seems quite bouncy and merry, again making the revenge murder seem to be inconsequential- if such a deed can be done on top of a cheery piece of music. I found the whole thing intriguing and subtly entertaining. Well pulled off!
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« Reply #13 on: July 05, 2020, 03:50:44 PM »
Great tune @montydog! Great storytelling in the lyrics. Love the instrumental at the end. A great classic! :)

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« Reply #14 on: July 05, 2020, 06:34:05 PM »
Knockout lyrics and a real down and dirty smoky vibe.

"Freshly turned earth in a wood in Wisconsin"

was the pick of the bunch...and enough to set it apart from the other 95% of writers

i thought that you might have found a couple of bits awkward to phrase?  That's maybe more because it's not the sort of thing i'm so familiar with...but it sounds great anyway!

i heard a line the other day...someone described someone else as being "a monday morning quarterback" which i thought was a brilliant line...and i thought "ooh...i wonder if i could use that in a song?" but i don't think i could...i'm too homespun, i think. You could, though...but why would you when you could write something better...

Backing was as cool as can be...and when the sax came in...it sounded like you were banging this out in a bar...and a sax player randomly dropped in for a beer on his way home and when he heard this, he thought "i'm having some of that" whipped it out of the case and joined in.

V cool.

 
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