[adamwolf]

Hello. So this is a song I wrote a while back and it's pretty self explanatory. I'd love to know what you think in general whether it's the lyrics or the the whole thing all together. Thanks



don't you blame me for what I've become
when you left me hanging dry
I thought I'd never say I'm done
thought I'd never let the world see me cry

I let you in my mind
I let you see the crack
thought you were standing by my side
so I guess I never saw it coming
when you stabbed me in the back

and don't you blame me for what I've become
when you left me hanging dry
I thought I'd never say I'm done
thought I'd never let the world see me cry

I let my walls down last time I saw you
I know you remember what said
how could you pretend you cared when you knew
how could you hear those words and still leave me for dead


don't you lie and say you can't tell
that I'm broken
remember what I told you about the gates of hell
what my eyes saw when they were open?

I let you in my mind
I let you see the crack
thought you were standing by my side
so I guess I never saw it coming
when you stabbed me in the back

[Jamie]

@adamwolf

Hi, you have a unique style and delivery. Some unusual chords brought together with a World weary vocal delivery. Very heartfelt song, I enjoyed it!

Cheers
Jamie

[Jambrains]

Good thing I had the lyrics in front of me since the vocals are very hard to hear.
I'll leave it to others to comment, I completely did not get this but then I'm a 4/4, 3 chords guy so I'm probably not in the target group for this 

[adamwolf]

@Jamie Thanks, man!

@Jambrains  Yeah I can never get volume of voice vs guitar right, lol thanks for listening though I appreciate ir

[shadowfax]

Lyrics are excellent but the delivery is lacking, it seems to me that you have a bigger song in your head but technically your not able to get it recorded due to, maybe lack of gear and experience or both, all muso's start the same way, I certainly did, I would say start the journey, get a DAW and get those ideas recorded so they sound nearer to what your hearing in your head..it's a long journey, the sooner you start the better.

[Paulski]

Hi Adam - as others have said - lyrics are strong.
I liked the chord progressions and the melody - but the time signature?
It's either too complicated for me to understand, or it doesn't fit any typical pattern..
Might be something to improve on.
Good vocal BTW 
Paul

[moraamarolaloba]

Hi @adamwolf

I find your song is really interesting, full of possibilities open to many arrangement... I
I like how you finish the lines of the lyrics, a special style, but when the guitar rhythm  part becomes quicker, may be you can give a similar rhythm to the lyrics on that part...
Well, it is just my way of thinking...

[montydog]

Hmm...interesting. Are you a fan of Billy Elish? There is a certain similarity in the delivery and vibe. This is a good lo fi recording which sounds true and unpolished. Unconventional but I love the originality (as long as you're not a Billy Elish devotee!)

M

[PaulyX]

Hey Adam, I think this is my favourite of yours that I've heard.  I like the dynamics in it the most - you take it up and down and then up again in terms of energy (both in the vocal and the guitar playing), plus there were some really smart chord choices.  Lyrically for me it's a little bit too monotone... No need to make it a 'happy song' of course but a few lighter lines amongst the dark imagery might make it a bit more nuanced and 3 dimensional, ya know? I sense you are on a real songwriting journey though and polishing your craft really quickly... keep em coming.

[adamfarr]

Hi Adam - this one's full of emotion and creativity. I don't think I've anything particular to suggest - but I do agree getting a DAW set up so you can start to edit and add or subtract things will help you leap forward in getting your ideas out there.
Look forward to hearing more.

[Sebandme]

@adamwolf your lyrics prod me, prick me genuinely move me.....I seriously think you are massively talented. I listen to that and I swear you put into a trance! I'm a massive fan!