My isolation

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wkamen

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« on: June 28, 2020, 04:01:48 PM »
Staring out the window
in the dark
Same old empty feeling
in my heart

Images embedded in my head
still remain and keeps coming back
keeps coming back in a song
Moments in Time

Every time I think about that song
I picture you and me
Walking the beach hand in hand,
Sharing popcorn at the movies
going to a ballgame
going to a local disco
dancing the night away

It's so lonely,
So empty,
In my room,
My Isolation

Memories slowed time
Bringing the darkness


Strapped to a chair,
Trapped by my own mind,
Looking at the open entryway
With demons dancing in my head
Feeding my mind with bitter thoughts.
The outside comes to my window,
All is vivid and near but can't be touched


(Chorus)
It's so lonely
So dreadful
So frightful
In my room,
My Isolation


The world may never end
But I may not have many days

Staring, silent, bare and hollow
looking out from within,
Still waiting for a rainbow
after the storm,

It's so lonely
so empty
so frightful
so hopeless
in my room
My isolation

My isolation

JonnyD

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« Reply #1 on: July 02, 2020, 08:33:31 PM »
Oof wow, that was dark. What genre do you intend this song to be? Have you already got music set to it? It seems like it has quite a complex structure to set music too, but obviously it doesn't matter if you already have music.

"Every time I think about that song
I picture you and me
Walking the beach hand in hand,
Sharing popcorn at the movies
going to a ballgame
going to a local disco
dancing the night away"

I really like the rhyme scheme in this section for some reason.

Was a snowman in a past life

wkamen

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« Reply #2 on: July 03, 2020, 11:56:32 PM »
I really like the rhyme scheme in this section for some reason.

For some reason  !!!

What reason  !!!!