I can't Live Without You

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irwin

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« on: June 22, 2020, 06:32:16 AM »
My expectation is that this song I've written and produced would be pleasing to the listener, so your feedback will be very much appreciated.

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I can’t Live Without You                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                     
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(Verse 1)
When we’re not together, I get to love you more
But when we’re with each other, I don’t even let it show
That I love you so, oh no
I don’t want you to know, I don’t want it to show, I don’t even want you to know

(1St Chorus)
I can’t live without you; I can’t live without hearing you say
You can’t live without me; you can’t live without hearing me say
I can’t live without you; I can’t live without you near
I can’t live without you

(Verse 2)
Stay with me forever, I’ll tell you what I’ll do
Go away I’ll never, I will never be untrue
This I want to prove, to you
I just want you to say, that you want me to stay, what I really want to you to say

(2Nd Chorus)
You can’t live without me; you can’t live without hearing me say
I can’t live without you; I can’t live without hearing you say
You can’t live without me; you can’t live without me near
I can’t live without you

(Bridge)
If you go away, I don’t know, what I do, without you
Without you, I don’t know, what I do, if you go away
I couldn’t stand the pain... I want you to stay
 I need you every day... so hear me when I say

 (1St Chorus)
I can’t live without you; I can’t live without hearing you say
You can’t live without me; you can’t live without hearing you say
I can’t live without you; I can’t live without you near
I can’t live without you

I can’t live without you



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« Reply #1 on: June 22, 2020, 08:36:24 AM »
A very Ibiza chill feel to this one. I also hear a bit of jazzy bossa nova. I always like a good breakdown and this one is very nice (possibly I'd also lose the claps in that section so that they have more impact when they return). It feels a little similar all through - perhaps some even more different percussion in the chorus could provide additional interest, but that's possibly also part of the "lounge" style.

The track as a whole is slightly quiet but that's easy to fix. Very cool sounds (bass is especially nice).

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« Reply #2 on: September 09, 2020, 02:30:40 AM »
A very Ibiza chill feel to this one. I also hear a bit of jazzy bossa nova. I always like a good breakdown and this one is very nice (possibly I'd also lose the claps in that section so that they have more impact when they return). It feels a little similar all through - perhaps some even more different percussion in the chorus could provide additional interest, but that's possibly also part of the "lounge" style.

The track as a whole is slightly quiet but that's easy to fix. Very cool sounds (bass is especially nice).

Hi adamfarr, Thank you so much listening to my song in the way you did and pointing on the points of which in your opinion that I should fix. Your opinion/suggestions I take them very serious, so I say thank you again.

P.S.   Sorry for the long delay. I almost miss your comment to make a reply

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