Hey everyone,
This is my first post here. I am primarily a music producer and audio engineer, not a songwriter. But every few years or so I feel the need to do something of my own. The music on this one is already done. It is a soft rock song, with a twist of jazz/funk. Verse 3 is rapped, not sang. The song is about someone struggling with anger management in his love relationship. Before verse 3 is an instrumental part with a guitar solo.
Please let me know your thoughts!
Twisting the Knife
Verse 1
Oh when you’re seeing my sorrow
Oh don’t you say it’s right, no don’t twist the knife
You know I long for tomorrow
I wish you understood that I’m not doing good
Chorus
Aah you got me spinning around
Aah stop teasing me it’s only wearing me down
Verse 2
And as the anger invades me
I’m using all my strength to resist my instinct
But I already know the story
It’s like a hurricane that’ll blow my brains
Chorus
Aah no way I’m winning this round
Aah stop hounding me it’s only wearing me down
Verse 3
Catch me on the move, I’m still thinking ‘bout you
Hara Kiri’d out my organs, deforming this brown dude
And left a vacuum, but who verbalises profound truth
Stands electrified, humming the tone of a ground loop
We vibrate, penetrated by memories we debate
How to shape a liquid metal but only in retrograde
We are elements combining and breaking up on a page
The pull of a bond stays once you’ve tangled your waves
It goes...