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« Reply #15 on: June 18, 2020, 09:50:24 AM »
I like this.
Pop rock. Those phrases on the verse are great.
“Just as I started”. “Beginning to move“ is another I really like.
There’s this immediacy n passion
That @pompeyjazz so easily pulls off.
Great rocky production

Stil, it is undeveloped
Hope you don’t mind me saying
It starts too early with repetition.
Ironically there is a stalling in the story.

I really enjoyed the first 2 minutes
“Ok, I’m on board, let’s go” “oh, we’ve already arrived”
Sometimes your wild excursions are just too short, not short but unfinished.
Maybe I’m too slow.
But I think you’ve so much to offer but you’re so rushed.
My advice. Give up the day job, get an amazing set list together with classy, committed musicians n hit the road. Perfecting those wild man songs.

As if Tyson gets in the ring against a tough guy.
After two explosively effective rounds
Competition dismayed at the revelation he never had anything to offer, he’s about to crumble. Suddenly, he’s told Tyson has gone for a drive. Lol.

In a word... behave yourself.
Respectfully, rightly
It's either this or that, then again it might be the other. 

I can promise you a future of slow decline.

Don't eat the yellow snow

And there you have it. 

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Jamie

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« Reply #16 on: June 18, 2020, 10:33:39 AM »
@pompeyjazz
Hi John, a straight up rocker, no messing. Loved the guitar tones, the instrumentation......everything really ;). Very nicely structured and performed, really good John!

Cheers
Jamie

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« Reply #17 on: June 18, 2020, 10:20:38 PM »
As others have said - great, straight up rock song... And all your usual elements of melody, bvs, perf delivered professionally ... Great stuff @pompeyjazz - great ending!!

Can imagine driving with the top down with this blaring.. great stuff..

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« Reply #18 on: June 19, 2020, 07:26:11 PM »

 Hey John,

 Excellent work mate  ;D.  Had me moving.....which 'aint easy ;D.  Some really nice guitar playing going on, especially liked the attack on the
 rhythm.  I wanted to hear more of that lead though, but thats me ;D

 Always a pleasure to hear you ROCK old chap....we're a dying breed ;D
 take care...stay safe

Nowt as queer as folk...........my gran