I really like your voice, someone mentioned Nick Cave and that is what I am hearing, too. Maybe a little Bowie, too. One thing, however: you do tend to get a little pitchy at times, or maybe like you aren't quite sure what note you want to sing, so you kinda wind up somewhere that is nowhere.
If you could iron that out, this would be even more powerful.
I do like the minimal backing. But, again... that just puts even more focus on your voice.
One lyrical nit: the word "history" in the second verse. I think you might be able to come up with a better, more powerful word or image. "Down in history" is just a bit overdone, I think.
Nonetheless, it's a pretty great tune. Beautiful stuff.
Thanks for the frankness.
I recall doing the vocal for this,
I think I just jumped straight in, knowing the map not the territory.
So there’s clearly substance to your observations.
I’ve never used
Name down in history
Didn’t know it was overused.
I never thought I’d be singing
You turn my screw
Lol. Now that really is slutty. Lol.
I must be slipping.
The next time I’ll work on this is when I record my “one takes” acoustic album.
I’ve got so many projects flopping about simultaneously,
I just can’t go back for a rewrite.
These things require an element of momentum.
@PopTodd I am slowly learning to not be so fast with jumping in.
I suppose you’re right on the money.
All the best buddy.