[Sebandme]

Hello everyone, I wrote this a couple a weeks more of an interlude than anything else. 3 different melodies over the same structure. Let me know what you guys think.... lyrics are not the best, an area of mine i most definitely need to work on 

https://soundcloud.com/sebastianandme/to-the-memories-i-lost?ref=clipboard

To the memories I lost

Keep on running
Keep on running
Keep on running away
Keep on running
Keep on running away

Cos years ago
I cant let go
Im on my knees
And im begging please

Cmon cmon cmon
Cmon cmon cmon cmon

[Jamie]

Hi, this sounds a bit incomplete to me. For sure there are some interesting parts that sound good and drive along,but I think it needs more work on the structure and the arrangement.
Sorry if that sounds a bit harsh.....your last song was brilliant.

Cheers
Jamie

[Sebandme]

@Jamie nope doesnt sound harsh at all. I agree with you 

[Andreas]

You sure do have a fantastic voice! I must agree with Jamie about it being a little incomplete tho. On the other hand, I could hear this being the intro track on an album, like many artists have these days So an "Interlude" might be the right word for it

[Sebandme]

@Andreas thank you very much.....yeah was trying to be an interlude thing but maybe to long for that...i dunno 

[shadowfax]

Lovin the intro!! like the first vocal bit, nice falsetto sounding like Muze , you need to finish this my friend, it's got such potential.

[Binladeda]

 Hi,
 Well, I like this a lot . Loved it when that pumping/driving bass kicked in.  Think it needs a 'breakdown' of some sort, and some attention to the start and finish
 The vocal is fine....fits like a glove .  Looking forward to hearing this finished
 take care, stay safe

[cowparsleyman]

@Sebandme -

See what you mean about the lyrics...kind of fitted the vibe, as you say it's kind of like a ready to use Outtro.

Sounds fine to me, thought the c'mon's were effective.

[pompeyjazz]

Hi @Sebandme I'm getting a great big hit of 80's indie to start off with a smattering of Muse thrown in. All over far too soon. Definitely one to continue with

[MonnoDB]

Hey @Sebandme  - this is catchy, fab vocals... As the others say, you could and should develop it.. hope you do! Look forward to it..

Karen

[kevysc]

This one  has a lot of potential.

How about using  the existing vocals/ melodies as being backing vocals and add a lyric/ melody on top? ( The Keep on Running is a good hook, by the way.)

Kevin

[Wicked Deeds]

@Sebandme,

When the vocal comes in, I really think this is superb. I do wish it would come in sooner. The intro is so long. I'd like to hear more lyrics as I think there is fantastic potential here.

Paul