A variety of "stuff" can come under the prosody heading. It's a LARGE area. My prosody comment relates to the turned-around wording of two lines. The thing is, that sort of thing has been done in poetry and songs for ages, and I really think it's a relatively new idea to make everything more like "common speech". I don't always agree, so I noticed it, but I don't think I would suggest to change it.
There is one possibility, though. One of those two lines is "with memories I’m blessed". Normally, I would expect the most important word (which I think is "memories") to be highlighted in some way, like being at the end of the line. That would be a problem in this case, though, as "I'm blessed with memories" wouldn't rhyme with "never should he find rest". And, actually, the rhythm and melody could be used to highlight "memories" right where it is.
To answer your question, no I do not. I remember grammar exercises in which we would say a sentence repeatedly, each time varying the rhythm and stress to get a different meaning. So, there's more than one correct way, but it might make a difference to the intent and meaning of the phrase or sentence.
I really enjoy songwriting for more than one reason, but one is because it is so much fun to fiddle with the words. And I always enjoy your writing, even though I don't give much feedback (I often can't think what I would say), because it seems so much thought goes into it.
