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The Rain is a Shade of Blue #Duet

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OleAnders

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« on: May 12, 2020, 10:11:44 AM »

[update 29.05.2020]
https://soundcloud.com/ole_anders/shade-of-blue-mix-052020-2/s-4bVoIf1V6Y2

The Rain is a Shade of Blue

Verse:
If you’re on your own
a bit roughed up
if someone hurt you just a little too much
And if your feet won’t find their way home
if there is no quiet inside
And if the world just seems a lot to carry
hold on for a while

Chorus:
The rain is a shade of blue
it gets a little cold, sometimes when you’re alone
the rain is a shade of blue, the color of your eyes
  give it time, time will set it right

Verse:
Don’t look so downcast
don’t hang your head so low
don’t treat each burden as if it was yours to carry all alone
There is a beauty; it’s hidden in each moment
a trace of love in everything

Chorus:
The rain is a shade of blue
it gets a little cold, sometimes when you’re alone
the rain is a shade of blue, the color of your eyes
  give it time, time will set it right
 
Why did you write your song?
Song developed from the chorus line. Quite a standard pop song and structure. Also very simple C,G,F with a Dm7 in the chorus. Written for purpose of exploring the pop song format while trying to make something relatable.

What are your aims for your song?
I do plan to publish the song in some format. May consider also making a more acoustic version as well with simpler arrangement.

What aspects of your song are you looking for comments about?
Did you enjoy the song? Do you think it has potential? Any comments on the songwriting (song structure, lyrics etc) or recording? Ideas on how to get music heard? And so on... please feel free to comment anything on your mind :)
« Last Edit: May 29, 2020, 08:41:54 AM by OleAnders »

adamfarr

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« Reply #1 on: May 13, 2020, 07:29:14 PM »
Hi Ole Anders
this is a super-pretty song. I heard a little country influence which worked well.

A couple of thoughts:
- you have "carry" in both verses - I might prefer a different image or expression in verse 1
- the duet also works well (I like both your voices). Though in some places the two voices don't line up 100%. This may be the feel you were going for, but I at times I felt it was a distraction
- the male voice (I guess yours!) seems too prominent to me, and could be turned down a little I would say.

But in general I'd say everything sounds great and you achieved what you set out to do. Very listenable and singalong-able.

IronKnee

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« Reply #2 on: May 14, 2020, 03:43:23 AM »
I agree with Adam...........this is a real pretty song.
Sweet!!
Has a Dylan feeling to it.....very compelling.
Love the tune....love the lyric....and the performances are great!
Good one!
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Jamie

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« Reply #3 on: May 16, 2020, 11:34:26 AM »
Hi, not a genre I would typically listen to, but I can say that I thought it was a well written song, structure nicely ,well performed, and was quite nicely recorded. My only criticism is that the piano solo didn't quite fit, the notes played didn't for me anyway, lean towards the melody or harmonies of the song.
Good voices!

Cheers
Jamie

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« Reply #4 on: May 17, 2020, 03:43:14 PM »
Hi Ole
This is a really nice song with a great chorus, good lyrics and a lot of potential.I just think, IMO,, that the arrangement could be improved on as I think the double tracked male/ female vocal in the verses seem to work against  each other whereas  a single vocalist in the verses would contrast better with the excellent duetted vocals in the chorus.

I also think, like Jamie,  that the piano instrumental is too long and doesn't seem to fit the song. Apart from these quibbles a very good song.


OleAnders

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« Reply #6 on: May 19, 2020, 11:56:00 AM »
Thanks for all your feedback, very useful.
I will follow your advice at least on the balance between the male and female vocals and balance them a bit better. I feel the male /my vocal is a bit loud particularly until the first chorus.

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« Reply #7 on: May 21, 2020, 09:03:46 AM »
Wonderfull song.......has everything going for it, has a nice familiarity about it like you've heard it before which is a sign of a good song.....extremely pro sounding deserves better than the current 50+ plays it currently has on Soundcloud.

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« Reply #8 on: May 21, 2020, 07:58:15 PM »
Very pretty song; I like it a lot. I would like to hear more contrast between the verses and the chorus--like maybe solo for the verses (taking turns?) with possibly some ahhs in the background, and then the full-on harmony duet for the chorus. I love that gorgeous high ahhhhhh in the chorus. You could really fatten up the chorus with more harmonies--each of you could sing two tracks. Just muttering my thoughts out loud...

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« Reply #9 on: May 24, 2020, 11:34:21 AM »
A so beautiful song and duet! @OleAnders
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« Reply #10 on: May 29, 2020, 08:43:28 AM »
Thanks for all your kind input. I have updated the mix resolving some of your comments by adjusting the balance between the male and female vocal.

[29.05.2020]
https://soundcloud.com/ole_anders/shade-of-blue-mix-052020-2/s-4bVoIf1V6Y2