[GazOwen]

I’d been wanting to write about who “they” are, we all talk about “them” but no one knows who they are.  This I suppose is directed at whoever “they” are to you.  I’m a huge Stereophonics fan and “Mr Writer” was a big influence.  It’s a long one but hope it grabs you

Happy to listen and learn from the group to improve

G x

https://soundcloud.com/gaz-owen-24812976/magic-money-tree

Magic Money Tree

I looked around this morning
There was little left to see
While everything drowns around us
And there’s nothing left for you or me

You have to see the reasons
Of this power trip they’re on
....You gotta question the way they make their moves
Or they’ll get their victims one by one

They’re taking all our prizes, they’ll take our dignity
It’s time we owned up to what we’ve known all along...
...that they don’t care for you or me

They’ll keep talking, they’ll keep walking
They’ll keep the truth away from you and me
They’ll keep taking, they’ll keep faking
They’ll keep shaking the magic money tree

They’re praying on the weakest
But we can help them still
They have to keep their feelings to themselves
If we don’t save them, no one will

So It’s time to make some changes
Changes for the best
It’s time we took control of our lives
And put them to the test

They’re taking all our prizes, they’ll take our dignity
It’s time we owned up to what we’ve known all along...
...that they don’t care for you or me

They’ll keep talking, they’ll keep walking
They’ll keep the truth away from you and me
They’ll keep taking, they’ll keep faking
They’ll keep shaking the magic money tree

Solo

They’ll keep talking, they’ll keep walking
They’ll keep the truth away from you and me
They’ll keep taking, they’ll keep faking
They’ll keep shaking the magic money tree

They’ll keep moving, they’ll keep ruling
They’ll keep the lies away from you and me
They’ll keep taking, they’ll keep faking
They’ll keep shaking the magic money tree

Magic Money Tree - Lyrics by Gaz Owen

[pompeyjazz]

Hi @GazOwen and welcome to the forum. Feel free to jump in. Yep, I can hear the Sterophonics influences. Great vocals and harmonies and lots going on. I liked those plinky plonky strings. The one thing that I would do personally is to cut back on the lead guitar a bit. There are some great licks in there but it does tend to dominate. Length wise, nothing wrong with a 7 minute song but maybe it could be cut down a bit without losing the impetus. Overall I really enjoyed the listen though

[Jamie]

Hi Gaz, and welcome to the forum, it's populated with a lot of talented people. If you join in you'll get lots of helpful and constructive comments  .

Hi yes getting the Stereophonics vibe. You have a good voice and the harmonies are nice and natural.I agree with @pompeyjazz ( John), that the lead guitar is a bit dominant. Its a little too loud and also, to my ear slightly out of tune . Good song, but could be edited a little to make it more 'punchy'.
Nice debut!

Cheers
Jamie

[MichaelA]

Hi Gaz, really promising first song. You've got a great vocal tone and smooth harmonies. The way you've put this together suggests you were or are in a band - you know how to pull together a great sound.

Trying to offer constructive ideas, well I don't think there's much appetite out there for such long songs myself, unless there is going to be a lot of development and variation to sustain interest. It takes two minutes to get to your first chorus and so I'd wonder about cutting those verses in half.

With a bit of editing - which sometimes is difficult if it means cutting stuff you are proud of - then this could be a more commercial and really engaging song. Good topic in the lyrics too, all well handled.

All the best with your music.