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JimmyNeutron28566

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« on: April 13, 2020, 07:25:28 PM »
Millennials

Linda always said she was the first one there, with a hand full of change and ribbons in her hair.
9-8-7-6-5-4, she counted every tile on the bathroom floor.

Jack was winning, with his big wooden bow. Pulls the arrow like a champ, shot an apple at his show.
It's no big deal he's done it before, but he'll never miss a beat if they're keeping score.

I want to be a doctor, a nurse and a chef. A mechanic, a builder and I won't sit a test. Don't keep telling me what to do. I'll never learn a thing if I'm always new.

Give it to me, I want it now.
Give it to me, I don't care how

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« Reply #1 on: April 18, 2020, 09:29:21 AM »
Millennials

Linda always said she was the first one there, with a hand full of change and ribbons in her hair.
9-8-7-6-5-4, she counted every tile on the bathroom floor.

Jack was winning, with his big wooden bow. Pulls the arrow like a champ, shot an apple at his show.
It's no big deal he's done it before, but he'll never miss a beat if they're keeping score.

I want to be a doctor, a nurse and a chef. A mechanic, a builder and I won't sit a test. Don't keep telling me what to do. I'll never learn a thing if I'm always new.

Give it to me, I want it now.
Give it to me, I don't care how

I liked this a lot.  The only thing I'd change is the format.  See below.  I wouldn't change a word. 

Linda always said she was the first one there,
with a hand full of change
and ribbons in her hair.

9-8-7-6-5-4,
she counted every tile
on the bathroom floor.

Jack was winning, with his big wooden bow.
Pulls the arrow like a champ,
shot an apple at his show.

It's no big deal he's done it before,
but he'll never miss a beat
if they're keeping score.

I want to be a doctor, a nurse and a chef.
A mechanic, a builder
and I won't sit a test.

Don't keep telling me what to do.
I'll never learn a thing
if I'm always new.

Give it to me, I want it now.
Give it to me, I don't care how. 

If it's formatted that way, it makes it easier for me to find the flow and cadence.
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JimmyNeutron28566

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« Reply #2 on: April 19, 2020, 03:37:06 PM »
Great thanks, that's really useful :-)