Last Night At The Station (Vocals by Ce Mz)

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pompeyjazz

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« on: April 02, 2020, 09:01:29 AM »
Hope you're all keeping well out there in isolation land  :)

On this song one of our newest members @Melusine2 Ce Mz, kindly offered to do some vocals on an acoustic number that I had been working on. She also very kindly invited me to join a French songwriters forum which is pretty similar to our setup.

All feedback is as usual gratefully appreciated.


I saw you last night at the station
You didn't see me
I thought it was you
It made me feel so blue
We talked and talked
But nothing seemed to work
And agreed to disagree

I need to take a vacation
Cos bad vibes are eating my head
I don't what to do
I'll make myself real ill
But thoughts of you
And everything you do
They just swell up inside my head

Remember that holiday
When we were so free
We skipped in the sand
And I held your hand
And nothing, nothing could destroy use

I see you in town every morning
At the cafe by the boulevard
Whatever he says
And even if he stays
I'm here for you
Love everything you do
And I'm not going away







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« Reply #1 on: April 02, 2020, 10:14:00 AM »
Lovely song and delicately sung. my only thoughts are that the guitar sounded a bit boomy here and there, I think I heard a Cello in the left ear but not sure...some frequency fighting goin on..hope you don't mind these thoughts John..just trying to help :)
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« Reply #2 on: April 02, 2020, 10:26:40 AM »
Thanks @shadowfax really appreciate your feedback. Although it's a stripped back song it was pretty difficult to mix.

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« Reply #3 on: April 02, 2020, 10:42:14 AM »
Very nice vibe indeed! Really like the cello and guitars (though check out Kev's thoughts too).

Vocals are lovely - that delay could be dampened a little though I think. Not sure but at times the music seemed to duck out of the way a little too much (could be a compression/limiter thing).

I could really imagine a duet in the middle section - I think your voices might complement each other really well.

Great simple arrangement. There is something of the "chanson" about it in the pacing and sentiments. Nice and short and sweet.


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« Reply #5 on: April 02, 2020, 02:05:34 PM »
@pompeyjazz @Melusine2
Hi John, nice collaboration guys.I find acoustic guitars difficult to record and mix too...Nicely sung, the arrangement has a nice sympathetic feel too.
Good work

Au revoir :P


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« Reply #7 on: April 04, 2020, 03:43:18 AM »
An awesome collab......something I envy (but, not in a bad way) I think it is wonderful that two people can get together and create something like this. Kudos, you two!!
Love it,
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« Reply #8 on: April 04, 2020, 07:11:34 PM »
Love the sound, if Kate Bush had done a country album this is what it would have sounded like.  :)

Great stuff though, really enjoyed it.

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« Reply #9 on: April 04, 2020, 07:14:09 PM »
@Jamie @IronKnee - Thank you guys for your feedback. I think that acoustic guitars (along with vocals) are always the most difficult to get right in the mix. It's certainly not an exact science !

Thanks once again  :)

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« Reply #10 on: April 04, 2020, 07:22:34 PM »
Lovely song @pompeyjazz - sounds kinda folky to me (which of course appeals to me). Lovely breathy vocals @Melusine2 - welcome to the forum - really enjoyed, very distinctive.

Fab Collab!! Hope you do more!!!

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« Reply #11 on: April 04, 2020, 07:28:00 PM »
enjoyed this
has an attractive kind of stones feel in the gtr , natural , really cool pompey
lovely vocal from CeMz,  sort of ethereal the way you placed it in the mix..

great collab yoos two
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« Reply #12 on: April 04, 2020, 09:45:58 PM »
I like the jangly acoustics in this a lot - somehow made me think of Dylan?  And the breathy delivery too, very nice.  It's definitely a unique mix, it felt very upfront to me but that was part of the character of it.  Lyrics were intriguing... I found the appearance of the third person in the last verse cool, it added a lot of backstory to it (the lyrics typed here say "he" but it sounds like "she"... either way I'm imagining a love triangle?).  I think I'd just tweak lyrics slightly in the first verse though - I didn't understand how "You didn't see me" made sense with "We talked and talked"... Unless he had his eyes shut I guess they must have seen each other?  Anyway that's a minor suggestion on a very characterful, folky, 60s influenced track.  You two should collab a bit more.
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« Reply #13 on: April 04, 2020, 10:14:54 PM »
Great collab. Love the vocals (definitely a Kate Bush vibe there). Hopefully will hear a lot more of you here, @Melusine2 !

Nice song, @pompeyjazz . Love the lyrics too.

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« Reply #14 on: April 04, 2020, 10:17:52 PM »
Thanks so much @PaulyX  Bien sur,  Cecile tweaked the he / she stuff and I'm really looking forward to working with @Melusine2 in future collaborations. A huge talent and a brilliant addition to our forum    :)