Hi guys ,
Please can you read my lyrics and see if you can find a better structure or a hook.
open to suggestions and guidance . any re-writes welcome .
the song is about drinking your problems away, but making everything 10 times worse. Looks at the cockiness of drinking and how it makes you think you are helping yourself figure everything out, but really you are explosive, raw and out of control. every thing seems justified at the time , but in the light of day , you have just created a shit storm for yourself.
"when every thing seems darker, in the cold light of day "
thank you. #
I don’t know why
But I don’t want to close my eyes.
So tired, but I’m still awake .
Cant shut off my mind,
With thoughts I cant shake,
I don’t know why,
I do the things I do.
When I know it upsets you
But I must be hurting too.
And I don’t know why,
No no, I don’t know why
No I don’t know why.
So focused, zoom in, look at the past,
Try to figure out what happened -Fill another glass. Clink.
Oh wait just a second, ive had a revelation,
Stop blaming other people, for you current situation.
Maybe it’s just me- have another drink .Clink.
Maybe then youll see- have nother drink Clink.
The sun is coming up- quick have another drink
Should have go to bed, but i got trapped in my head.
So brave and bold, will never do as im told
Drinks in witts out , no better time to shout-clink
Oh wait just a second, ive had a revelation,
I can do , what I want, as and when I please?
Wont show any mersy, spreading like a desese,
In 24 hours I’ll be begging on my knees!
Wish I went to bed, but I know I wouldn’t sleep.
I don’t know why
But I don’t want to close my eyes.
So tired, but I’m still awake .
Cant shut off my mind,
With thoughts I cant shake,
I don’t know why,
I do the things I do.
When I know it upsets you
But I must be hurting too.
And I don’t know why,
No no, I don’t know why
No I don’t know why.
