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maya sagi

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« on: January 30, 2020, 07:31:55 PM »
I wish I could feel what Im saying
and say what I actually feel
I wish I would get my happy ending
But I know it isnt real
I wish I could make up something
to make the world a better place
I wish I didnt have million insecurities
written all over my face
I wish I could write some better lyrics like no one heard before
 I Wish I could find a question I really know the answer for
I wish I could love somebody and that they would feel it to
I wish I didnt want some more expensive things but I really do


I know its really short But I didnt want to make it longer because I feel like I said what I needed to say.
Im open to any sort of feedback good or bad.
and Im sorry about my broken English Its not my first language

hardtwistmusic

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« Reply #1 on: March 02, 2020, 09:35:18 AM »
Don't worry about it being short.  It says all it needs to.  MANY songs from the history of music were lyrically sparse, and filled in with musical bridges.  If the music is incredible, then this (i.e. your lyric) is all that a lyric needs to be.

And I'll say this again to emphasize it.  This says ALL IT NEEDS TO SAY TO BE A COMPLETE LYRICAL EXPERIENCE.

I think this is brilliant.  I wish I had written it.
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John Alty

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« Reply #2 on: March 02, 2020, 02:52:16 PM »
I think it's really good.