[irwin]

Hi, great vocals, and the basis of a good song. As others have said some further development could add interest and variation in the production, arrangement and instrumentation.
Very good.

Cheers
Jamie

Hi Jamie, I thank you for choosing my song to leave a comment. About the Great vocals...I think I am fortunate to have her as my vocalist collaborator and yes! Further development, arrangement and instrumentation I will be aiming in that direction for sure. Thanks for the rely

Irwin

[irwin]

Very catchy elements to this, particularly the ‘Just to think you’re not here it hurts’ line.

I can hear the reverb on the vox and synth parts but overall there seemed to be quite a dryness to the track.

Lovely singing from your vocalist.

I agree with the comments about it benefiting from a little more development.

Yodasdad

I thank you for sharing your thoughts on my song Yodasdad, I appreciate it a lot.

@Irwin

[Boydie]

I agree with the others about the potential

The vocal is gorgeous and there are some nice melodies

The biggest issue I have is the lack of "cohesion" - it sounds like the bass, drums and synths are playing completely different songs

My suggestion for a would be to establish a basic "beat" that carries throughout the track - rather than the "stop/starty" nature of the drums ad bass

This would then allow the other elements and the vocals to groove along to it, which would pull everything together

Some kind of smooth "pad" (synth or string bed) would also assist tying everything together

I think there is a great song in there is you are able to pull everything together

[irwin]

Thank you for the feedback folks, so many wonderful suggestion but I think I've met my limit with this production to develop any much more I have to ask for help. 

@Irwin