The place where ideas ran out

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maya sagi

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« on: January 19, 2020, 09:27:27 AM »
River swept by with the currents sank me to the ground
 I learn to kick my feet to float and rediscover what I already found
 broken bridges that are never to be rebuilt
 a curvy road with no sign of human saul cause no one wants to be
at the place where ideas ran out
broken building made of desire
tumble down in smoke and fire
and wind blows just to reveal what used to be
the outline of my biggest trait
so i have nothing left to do but wander with myself

 at the place where ideas ran out where did they go?
 what its all about? I really dont know
 its so empty and quiet dont know where to go
 but ill just keep walk on by and look for this toughts
 cause this is the place where ideas ran out

 keeping myself busy by having a convrosation in my mind
 reminding myself how i used to beleive that love is blind
 that we dont pick who we love based on their image
 but based on we are and we are alone with our feelings
 but i cant be that girl again i have seen some stuff ive changed
 but i still have the habit of always asking how and why
 so heres a good one if im not that girl who am i
  am i the girl who let  achievements get into her head
 am i the one who sings about sadness without being sad
 am i the one who starts the fight just to feel the hit
 am i the one who always finds something to bu hurt from even tho im landing on my feet

 at the place where ideas ran out where did they go?
 what its all about? I really dont know
 its so empty and quiet dont know where to go
 but ill just keep walk on by and look for this toughts
 cause this is the place where ideas ran out

it feels lonley out in here the weather is hot but i am cold
 and all the water from my hair touches the ground and truns to gold
 to show me im one the right way to recuptre all this time
 and as i take my hand to squeeze my hair i discover that the answer was always there
 they say time can heal most anything but it dosent heal our scars
 but it does have tha ability to make them who we are

 at the place where ideas ran out where did they go?
 what its all about? I really dont know
 its so empty and quiet dont know where to go
 but ill just keep walk on by and look for this toughts
 cause this is the place where ideas ran out

 i ralized everything can be rebuilt
 so i go to the broken bridge next to me
 and start to piece it toghter brick by brick hope by hope tought by tought goal by goal




hey sorry if my english is bad it's not my first language

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« Reply #1 on: January 19, 2020, 12:15:35 PM »
This is very interesting. I have a few suggestions.

River swept by with the strong currents sank pulled me to the ground down
I learned to kick my feet to float and rediscover what I already found

at the place where ideas ran out where did they go?
what its what's it all about? I really dont know
its so empty and quiet dont know where to go
but ill just keep walking on by and look for this toughts around
cause this is the place where ideas ran out

That's as far as I got, but may give you some ideas. I'm not sure I am accurately reflecting your thoughts with my suggestions, so take them or leave as works for you.

I noticed the rhythms of this are very loose and inconsistent, which would make it difficult (for me, anyway) to set to music. I'm sure someone could do it, though. And I'd be really curious to hear how it could be done.

Best of luck with it.

Vicki

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« Reply #2 on: January 25, 2020, 09:59:04 AM »
thanke you so much