Yesterday will leave (fully produced)

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Wicked Deeds

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« on: November 27, 2019, 08:36:34 PM »
I initially made an acoustic sketch of this song and posted it on the forum hoping that someone might wish to produce it further. Since no one came forward, I decided to devote a little more attention to this song.  What started out as a very basic demo became a huge, extravagant string based production and I very much enjoyed the process of adding further production.  I think it really captures emotion and at times drives along with real purpose.  Maybe one day I'll revisit the end section with backing vocals and electric guitar. Still, I'm really happy with the way this has turned out.

https://soundcloud.com/pvasey1/yesterday-will-leave-master


Yesterday Will Leave

I was the first one you noticed
amongst all other guys.
You looked in my direction
through those beautiful eyes.

I won't forget the journey to the graveyard
so we could learn to live, learn to love again.
When we first declared that we would both be lovers
in the rain.

Then we drove through the darkness
with your hand on my hand.
We were lost in the moment.
I was yours to command.

I won't forget the way I ran towards you
or the love you brought to brighten up the night.
For the first time, I was looking in a mirror.
It was right.

In time you will see, you mean everything to me.

The pain of yesterday will leave.
The pain of yesterday will leave.
The pain of yesterday will leave.
The pain of yesterday will leave.

Written by Paul Vasey

November 2019

https://soundcloud.com/pvasey1/yesterday-will-leave-master
« Last Edit: December 16, 2019, 07:22:55 PM by Wicked Deeds »

PaulyX

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« Reply #1 on: November 27, 2019, 08:56:59 PM »
Firstly, cracking title Paul.  I actually think the simple production works really well as it is - it gives plenty of space to the delicate melody and vocal delivery.  Really like the conclusion with the repetition of the title line too - and I like the way that cracking title doesn't appear in the lyrics until that point right at the end.  Much to like in this track - nice one.
It's all too beautiful.

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« Reply #2 on: November 28, 2019, 09:37:04 AM »
A very gentle song which works as is...very good title, maybe it could develop a little towards the end but then again, maybe not..

A fine song to have in your back catalogue my friend... :)
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« Reply #3 on: November 30, 2019, 02:30:01 PM »
A classic slice of top quality writing Paul @Wicked Deeds The finger picking is lovely. It works as it is IMO. If I was to suggest anything it maybe some subtle strings kicking in here and there.

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« Reply #4 on: November 30, 2019, 07:57:34 PM »

 lovely song Paul  ;D .  you're on a roll mate...must have found your muse ;D ;D
 hope all is well in your world old friend....classy stuff as usual. Thoroughly enjoyed the listen ;D
 ....and well done for hitting that high note  ;D ;D ;D
 take care mate

Nowt as queer as folk...........my gran

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« Reply #5 on: November 30, 2019, 10:00:40 PM »
I also like the simple approach on this. lovely melody and finger picking.
You picked some very nice notes to hit at the end changing each line.
As already suggested adding some Strings would be a nice touch....nice job!


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« Reply #6 on: December 01, 2019, 11:09:13 AM »
I absolutely love how stripped back the song is, I don't think that needs to be changed! The title is great too, would definitely pick that out of a spotify playlist. Great song, really enjoyed :)

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« Reply #7 on: December 01, 2019, 01:54:12 PM »
Beautiful and quite touching.

You're a master of your craft.
heart of stone, feet of clay, knob of butter

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« Reply #8 on: December 02, 2019, 11:36:25 AM »
So delicate and vulnerable. I love just the guitar and vocal for this one....just suits the emotion  :'( Classic piece of song writing Paul

Wicked Deeds

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« Reply #9 on: December 02, 2019, 08:34:40 PM »
I'll wait a little while before expressing my thanks to all who have reviewed this song as I've now fully produced this song.  It's all me playing except for the Logic royalty free sample of theharp that I have cut and pasted at the end.  This is in mp3 format so it suffers a little as I should have it mastered as a WAV file.  Consequently, it has been compressed twice upon loading it to soundcloud.  It would be lovely to hear opinions on th sketch version and the fully produced version.  Thanks.

Paul

https://soundcloud.com/pvasey1/yesterday-will-leave-high-balanced

Paulski

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« Reply #10 on: December 05, 2019, 01:44:20 AM »
Nice one Paul.
I only heard the fully produced version and it is really quite accomplished :D
Your vox are vulnerable and suit the mood perfectly and everything fits together nicely.
I was going to complain that the hook wasn't getting repeated but then you did repeat it at the end so all was sorted.

Good work  ;D ;D
Paul

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« Reply #11 on: December 06, 2019, 12:32:15 PM »
Hi Paul
an enjoyable song indeed - the graveyard is a very memorable line which can take on a literal and figurative meaning. I like the way this could have been very sentimental but is more upbeat and positive.
If you absolutely asked me to choose I would probably say that I liked the bare bones version a tad more. Perhaps including a stripped back section within this one would work? The "drove through the darkness" section is an obvious choice but comes too early on - maybe around the "in time you will see" could work to emphasise the title when it comes back.
Anyhow, when a song's good it can work in multiple ways and this is a good one.

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« Reply #12 on: December 08, 2019, 10:03:15 AM »
Hi Paul,

Sounds like this belongs in the soundtrack of a movie - end credits maybe as it has an air of conclusion about it.
Nice ending to leave the song embedded in your head.

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« Reply #13 on: December 11, 2019, 12:33:55 PM »
A big thanks Tom all who left a comment.  I'm really pleased with this song and it is very close Tom my heart.

Thanks

Paul

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« Reply #14 on: December 11, 2019, 04:16:14 PM »
Hi Paul, a classy little piece. Love the arrangement and the instrumentation. Stays delicate but interesting at the same time. Your vocal sits very nicely over it and the whole thing is complimentary. Really nice song.

Nice one!

Cheers
Jamie