I Wish For Merriment [POP PUNK, ALT ROCK,, ETC]

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Asith

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« on: November 26, 2019, 05:25:30 PM »
Just a demo for now, but see what you think!
https://soundcloud.com/user-732643919/i-wish-for-merriment

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I wish for merriment
And going home for dangerous games
Your scented cherry bomb
Daylight never shone this way
I aim for satisfaction
Your breath is my distraction
I wish for merriment and you can't stop me

You stay up late tonight, you sleep the next one out of spite
You're sick contextualized, you've got a different mind
Wish soaked in varicose, resembling Sunday's overdose
A million ways to die
But live until you're satisfied

Deface your demons, bless
Sacrilege meet happiness

I wish for merriment
And going home for dangerous games
Your scented cherry bomb
Daylight never shone this way
I aim for satisfaction
Your breath is my distraction
I wish for merriment and you can't stop me

The things that made us sick come back around on the brink
Of desperation, patience, I still say we're meant to be
Let's see your tiger stripes, your shots, your worst night, happy low life
This sounds worse than it is, what's a little reckless bite

We ran this town a mess
Let's get lets get torn to shreds

I wish for merriment
And going home for dangerous games
Your scented cherry bomb
Daylight never shone this way
I aim for satisfaction
Your breath is my distraction
I wish for merriment and you can't stop me

I wish for merriment
And all the things that bring me joy
You toxic animal
You bleed, I taste, we rule the world
I am the price of labour
Be on your best behaviour
I wish for merriment
And you can't stop me

PaulyX

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« Reply #1 on: November 26, 2019, 10:02:20 PM »
Hi Asith, welcome.  There's a good track in here... some interesting lyrics, not predictable.  I like the line about the cherry bomb, getting ripped to shreds, the tiger stripes.  I like your voice too - well suited to this kind of indie vibe.  The song to me had a bit of a Velvet Underground lo-fi feel.  Main thing to work on is the production of course... not sure how you are recording it but the guitar is massively clipping by the sound of things.  This would be cool with a decent mix behind it and some more tracks to flesh it out (get some bass and more interesting drums in there).  Just get your hands on a DAW and you'll be rocking.  Definitely has good potential and personally, this kind of indie vibe is right up my alley, I hope you can polish it.  Anyway, enjoy the forum, review some tracks and you'll get great feedback here.
It's all too beautiful.