Eye of the storm - Leo & Neil

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Neil C

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« on: November 07, 2019, 08:37:54 AM »
Hi,
Here's a collaboration with Leo aka @LostBoy that was a lot of fun.
I came up with a 80's pop rock with a synth tune on my mobile using garageband and sent it over to Leo. He liked and and started to work on the melody and then the words. We used to share idea on dropbox and talked on WhatsApp, which was good and slightly strange actually talking in real time to a forum member!

We spent a fair bit of time refining elements and then getting the mix right. Anyway we like what we've produced but would really like your feedback and suggestions.
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Nel

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I was warned I should get back home

Board up the glass and hope she moves on

This woman leaves a trail of broken hearts

But sheʼs beautiful
I see no big bad wolf...only her

Ivy come find me

Iʼm flirting with disaster this I know

But something inside me

Cannot resist the eye of a storm
The eye of a storm

We made love underneath the stars

She was my queen of hearts for a while

But when I looked into her hazel eyes in the morning

I knew right then that sheʼd already gone

She was long gone

Ivy come find me

Iʼm flirting with disaster this I know

But something inside me

Cannot resist the eye of a storm
The eye of a storm

She tore right through my heart

I didnʼt stand a chance

So beware, sheʼs a force of nature

Whoʼs only gonna leave ya sooner or later

Ivy come find me

Iʼm flirting with disaster this I know

But something inside me

Cannot resist the eye of a storm
The eye of a storm

Bull/Connor c 2019
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shadowfax

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« Reply #1 on: November 07, 2019, 01:12:16 PM »
A song worthy of the group Journey!, great singing and instrumentation, the drop to the lead guitar break, (in my humble opinion) lets the song down, it just doesn't sound like the same level of professionalism as the rest of the song and doesn't fit the song either...just my take on it guys.. :) the fact that it's a very cool song remains...

pompeyjazz

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« Reply #2 on: November 07, 2019, 09:14:53 PM »
Great collab @Neil C and @LostBoy superb vocals and instumentation as we would expect. I loved the way the 80s synth pads underlayered the whole sound. The guitar solo was fab but maybe that section was a bit sparse. Nothing wrong with that but maybe a subtle synth in the background just to maintain the flow.  Fabulous work both of you  :)

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« Reply #3 on: November 08, 2019, 02:17:22 PM »
Well this was bound to be good, when one of the best vocalists on the forum teams up with one of the most interesting guitarists.

Lovely chorus in this.

Only nit - Up to the instrumental break you have got many atmospheric layers going on, so I thought you took a bit too much away at that point. Mind, it does make it all very strong again when everything is back in.

Very enjoyable collaboration all the same!

Bostonfan2

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« Reply #4 on: November 08, 2019, 04:04:12 PM »
Yeah what A team these two make....Im a big fan of Neil's guitar work and he is
excellent here as well. I LOVE the vocals on this track!! just nailed it.
The Delivery, Pitch and emotion are all there. REALLY great job on this tune its awesome!!

Ray

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« Reply #5 on: November 09, 2019, 08:55:52 AM »
Two very talented guys joining together to produce a great track.  Neil, your production skills are really shining here.  This is a track with real impact and the vocals as ever are wonderful.  This is my second listen and I must say, I’m very impressed with the writing and production.  So very well done chaps!

Paul
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Jamie

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« Reply #6 on: November 09, 2019, 12:50:23 PM »
Hi guys, great collaboration . A fab piece of polished professional AOR! I also think the guitar solo break needs something else, maybe a pad with chords to give the guitar something to hang onto harmonically. Still a great song, and production.
Nice one guys!
Cheers
Jamie

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« Reply #7 on: November 16, 2019, 03:14:56 PM »
@shadowfax @pompeyjazz @MichaelA @Bostonfan2 @Wicked Deeds @Jamie Thanks very much for taking a listen guys. Your feedback is always useful and I agree with the solo needing something else aswell. 😁👍🏻

A HUGE thanks to Neil @Neil C for a really inspiring track to write with and for being so cool to work with.🎶👊🏻🎶😁🍻

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« Reply #8 on: November 16, 2019, 04:51:55 PM »
Hey guys - lovely song and a great collab.. Great chorus, melody is gorgeous, very catchy.. Of course it's beautifully sung and played :) and I do agree with the consensus on the solo section - it feels a little empty / stripped back in contrast with the rest...

Quality stuff!

LostBoy

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« Reply #9 on: November 20, 2019, 09:50:25 PM »
Thanks very much Karen. 😄🎶👊🏻🎶🙏🏻

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« Reply #10 on: November 22, 2019, 03:10:31 PM »
 @Neil C & @LostBoy
knock out song and performance you chaps
real muscle in the sound
intros dripping with anticipation.. lovely stuff
and the lift on the chorus is jumbo shaped and flys .. superb vocals ..
you know its good when you cant wait for the chorus to come rund again
i kind of heard the mid section as the eye of the storm..?
whatever..
really powerful track
i may not believe this tomorrow...

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adamwolf

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« Reply #11 on: November 22, 2019, 05:42:05 PM »
The lyrics are amazing, especially the chorus, so well written! The production is great of course, I feel like something could go a littler softer during the verses just so that when the chorus comes in it could hit that much harder.
I love the melody of the chorus by the way, with that synth...oh man it's all just great. I feel like something like that synth could be added to the guitar solo though? Or anything to kind of fill the sound up a bit.
Anyway this is an awesome song
let my blood only run out when my world decides
so run on...
run on

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« Reply #12 on: November 22, 2019, 07:45:29 PM »
Reminded me of Simple Minds for some reason.
Great track!
Remember.... it's just my opinion. It doesn't make me right. Although i probably am ;)

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« Reply #13 on: November 22, 2019, 09:40:15 PM »
Yo @Neil C  @LostBoy

A mega catchy chorus with this one,great singing from Leo and a fine production overall.

I'm in the camp with those saying the arse falls out on the instrumentation behind the guitar solo,the song loses dynamics big time for me.

That aside,this is a quality offering from you two.  8)

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« Reply #14 on: November 23, 2019, 06:55:08 PM »
Have been listening to this on my playlist and it gets my vote for song of the year.
Are you guys considering any tweaking to the guitar break? the outro from it is
brilliant, and the playing is wonderful but I wonder if there maybe something better
matching the great vibe of this tune. Awesome track!  :)