Most of my songs are more on the acoustic rock side, and I can never really bring them to life the way I'd hope because I fail miserably whenever I try to write other tracks, be it lead guitar or a drum track.
So this is all I can do at the moment. I wanna know what stands out as good about this, and what stands out as bad or needs work? Vocals, guitar playing, lyrics, the song all in all, as much detail as you're willing to go because I don't think I can tell when it's me, I'm either too critical or the other way around and no in between.
lyrics:
I've got a burning soul
and the truth is
I'm all alone
alone in this
I asked for help but it's overrated
they're lies they sell and I hate it
just take this pill and you'll sedate it
but I'm still numb and suicidal
and it's the sun and it's my idols
there's no where to run
it is final
'cause I've got a burning soul
and the truth is
I'm all alone
alone in this
if it's flooding up, with me in a corner
then I can't keep up, & I built these borders
the gates are shut, they're my orders
but I will not speak, bare my soul
it's mine to keep, back away from the wall
I've declared defeat, I'll silently crawl
'cause everyday I rise, it gets duller
I close my eyes, try to remember colors
I lay to die, with no friend or a brother
I was born
destined for this
a wall of thorns
the dark of the abyss
no crown no throne
no star to miss
a wall around home
if that's what it is
& I am all alone
alone in this
I would be indebted to you forever if you gave me advice on how to work on my vocals. Also at the moment what are my biggest weaknesses? Being in tune? Lacking character? Lacking emotion? Lacking more technical stuff, I wanna know more specifically, what's good and what's bad right now, do I have potential and how do I get better?