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If A Mountain Crashed (Acoustic)

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adamwolf

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« Reply #15 on: October 14, 2019, 01:55:10 PM »
Hi Adam
You've got a great emotive voice - and that makes the song dramatic IMO.
Damn good for a first song posted on here.
I think you could work on your timing a bit - I had a problem detecting a time signature in this that was consistent. But maybe it's just me.
Keep writing - you got the talent  ;D
Paul

Thanks, I'm glad my you think that about my voice!
Yeah I definitely don't have the greatest sense of rhythm, I'll work on it.
I really appreciate it, thanks Paul :D
and though we cry
we must stay alive
let my blood only run out
when my world decides
there is no way out
of your only life
so run on...
run on

adamwolf

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« Reply #16 on: October 14, 2019, 05:50:59 PM »
Just love this, real proper gripping right from the off, paulski said it all.

Thanks for this

Thank you!
and though we cry
we must stay alive
let my blood only run out
when my world decides
there is no way out
of your only life
so run on...
run on

adamwolf

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« Reply #17 on: October 14, 2019, 05:53:48 PM »
You sound very young Adam,so if you keep this level of quality going good things will happen.

The song stands alone,one voice and one guitar and that's a great start. Keep the faith and thanks for sharing.  8)

yeah lol, thanks! I have been singing for a few years though and I feel like I should be better especially that I wanna get the hang of it before my voice starts changing but I have no idea what I'm doing no matter how much I sing and read about it. So if you have any advice there please tell me :D
and though we cry
we must stay alive
let my blood only run out
when my world decides
there is no way out
of your only life
so run on...
run on

adamwolf

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« Reply #18 on: October 14, 2019, 05:57:58 PM »
Just an idea listen to missy higgins Forgive Me, then re record it in you bathroom...If your mic lead goes that far...and give the more passionate lines some welly....

I'm listening to it right now. I'll try that and see what comes out of it, thanks for the idea because I need all the help I can get. :D
and though we cry
we must stay alive
let my blood only run out
when my world decides
there is no way out
of your only life
so run on...
run on

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« Reply #19 on: October 15, 2019, 06:27:37 AM »
@adamwolf , I think there is great potential in your writing and I hear a lovely voice that will surely develop and engage many people in time. I'm not going to make suggestions here. You'll find your own way and with dedication, you will write many wonderful songs as the years unfold.

Paul