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Slava B. - Games of System

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SlavaB

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« on: September 25, 2019, 03:39:06 PM »
Hi guys,

Prior and After releasing my EP "Ants" had a busy times, gigging and going on radio shows and working towards media exposure I wrote this track, literally an hour ago and would love to know your opinions.


Lyrics :

I laid down on the ground
My eyes shut, i see my dreams
Twisted action, crazy time
Have no light, it just highlights.
Feeling cold, and feeling wind
Someone help me to come back

Verse 1

Daily work and Daily meetings
Daily stress and daily nerves
Daily faces, Daily habbits
I fed up to see all this

Soon as i start planning further
Some restriction does come up
I need changes, changes changes changes
To prevent me going down!

Chorus :
Iam not , iam not
Iam not going down, im telling you now!

Verse 2

Start improving and develop
Certain plans which just may help
And like always something happens
Something going not to plan

Iam diving inside me
Go unconcious i felt down
I can see no body near
Who can help me to standstill

Chorus

Darkness filling up my eyes
Felt on stone - felt like feather pillow
I wont be back, to that world
To feel the pain and play systems game.

PaulyX

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« Reply #1 on: September 25, 2019, 10:09:22 PM »
This just made me grin from ear to ear.  I love that massive wide fuzzy guitar sound in the choruses.  The lyrics are cool - a neat summary of the angst of a very bad admin day.  I like the handclap section too.  But most of all, it is that guitar sound stretching from horizon to horizon that I like the most.  Yeah yeah!
It's all too beautiful.

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« Reply #2 on: September 25, 2019, 10:15:02 PM »
Hey @SlavaB I'm so pleased to hear that you're managing to manipulate the media and get some radio play. You have been missed  ;) I always love the stuff that you do and I know that know your production stuff. The only thing that I would say would be with regard to lyrics in English. If you wanted it to be in perfect English ,it might need some amendments but I would say leave it as it is as it enhances your image 😀 Plus it gives your song so much grit. Go for it Man, you will always have my support  !

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« Reply #3 on: September 27, 2019, 11:41:06 AM »
Hi, Liked the guitar sounds and the Rammstein style vocals. The angsty style vocals were at odds with the pedestrian message of a bad day  ;D ;).
Enjoyed it!
Cheers
Jamie

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« Reply #4 on: September 29, 2019, 12:38:03 PM »
Go slava,   I have only respect for you man, you write songs, play em live, make something happen, you don’t sit around waiting for a contact to land on your lap.

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« Reply #5 on: October 01, 2019, 09:15:47 AM »
This one flows really well (I can't do this in an hour!). It's a complete song and the contrasting guitars, and keyboards, are really effective.

Probably a bit of honing would improve it (e.g. the feather pillow line needs some work to fit to the backing) but it essentially works as it is!

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« Reply #6 on: October 01, 2019, 01:59:10 PM »
Lovin your style SlavaB.

The only thing I'd fix would be the tuning on the solo acoustic,'tis a mite off.

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« Reply #7 on: October 04, 2019, 03:52:01 PM »
Wicked stuff, great unique Eastern European pop rock style you got here. Love the vocal delivery.
Just enjoyed the weird catchiness of it all.
Put a great big smile on my face.
:-)
neil
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