I would really like honest feedback on this part of a song I wrote. I'm thinking maybe at times it's not good enough but I wanna see what other people think. The song 'I Confess' and it reflects on a true story about girl that I really but her life is just so out of control as she doesn't understand relationships because she has a new Bf every couple of weeks and every time the same outcome happens, she gets her heart broken. I feel bad for her at times she doesn't deserve, I only wish she see some sense that every time I've always supported her since day one because I only wish she see that I could be that person to make her happy that no other man has ever done for her. She's amazing, I know she can always do better I will always be right by her side cuz I care about her in every single way. This song hasn't got a chorus yet because I'm still working on it as its only a rough outline of what I'm planning but feel free to give your honest opinions on it as it would be much appreciated.
I CONFESS
Oh, I don’t even know where it’s gonna end
Cuz I see you with another man again
Only lately has it been becoming a trend
Cuz everyday it’s the same, I see it all over your facebook page
You said you’ve only known him 3 days but already engaged
I’m not one to complain to know that you think that it’s okay
Even though I really think your making big mistake
But you don’t realise this pain is too much for me
Cuz when you say he’s the best you’ve ever had
Only for it to fall apart when he ends up breaking your heart again
If only you could understand how it’s hurting me as a friend
Please don’t pretend, knowing that I’m always right there
Just to show how much I really care, it ain’t fair (X2)
I’ve been hearing all these rumours that you been sleeping around
And it’s not hard to figure it out that now you with that boy from downtown
But I already heard that he let you down
When you tell me he didn’t, but your friends are telling me different
But I know you just don’t wanna listen
Knowing that your always repping with your bad girl image
Why you gotta hide all that innocence now that your becoming so distant
You always show me what I’m missing