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Girlinside

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« on: August 31, 2019, 05:04:52 AM »
I’m recovering from a breakdown and wondered if I could use this to write my lyrics which help

Stand by me oasis Katie version

Been in so much pain and hurting
didn’t know what to
trapped inside my own mind
what’s the matter with me
don’t you know my heart is broken

What’s the matter with me ?
don’t you know my soul is cracked
don’t you know , how hard it’s been

Stand by me , stand by me
If I don’t make it
Remember me

don’t you know how much I loved
nobody knows , nobody knows
nobody knows sees my pain

nobody knows , the way that it’s been

I’ve been hanging on for over forty years
that’s a long time to yearn

Stand by me , stand by me
Stand by me , stand by me
Stand by me , stand by me
Stand by me , stand by me
Stand by me , stand by me
Stand by me , stand by me


Girlinside

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« Reply #1 on: August 31, 2019, 05:16:00 AM »
Hey now oasis Katie version

I took a ride with my mind
back to my memories
but everything seemed so black

I wanted to visit my past
but none seemed to wave back at me

all this time it’s been a living hell
but I could never tell

felt such pain
took on the blame
no sun only rain

I can’t believe that I’m still here
feel such pain , all that blame

I took a ride with my mind
back to my memories
but everything seemed so black

how can you share what’s hid in your mind  ?
everyone tries to be kind
but no one one understands

all that pain , all that blame

my mind wouldn’t let anyone in
I thought that I could cope

Feel the pain , all that blame

I took a ride with my mind
back to my memories
but everything seemed so black

Hey now Katie , hey now
head up be proud of who you are x


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« Reply #2 on: August 31, 2019, 09:34:35 AM »
Hey Katie, I think the second Katie version wins by a mile!  (You don't need to borrow from the Gallaghers with the stand by me lines etc, you are a fine lyricist in your own right).  The turnaround at the end to the optimistic couplet is great and I like the "waving back at me" line.  Nice one and I hope it offered some catharsis to you to get the words out.
It's all too beautiful.

Girlinside

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« Reply #3 on: August 31, 2019, 01:16:05 PM »
Thank you it helps it’s been a very hard time xx

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« Reply #4 on: August 31, 2019, 01:19:38 PM »
Sorry to hear of your troubles Katie. Be assured you are well respected in your capacity as a lyricist and I hope you take some comfort in that.

I've posted the latest track based on your work,it's up now in finished songs.

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