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nooms:
big thanks to neil for his patience .. i was supposed to put this up weeks back but real life had other plans..
a song from the hampshire weaver and myself..
hope it hits the spot
all or any thoughts welcome, we wanna get it right

https://soundcloud.com/nooms-1/i-want-my-share-master-10-feb-2019/s-kxtEe

 WANT MY SHARE 

well im keeping my blues, subterranean
but my thoughts roaring out,  like a stadium   
no there aint no use in me explaining
what i found in your albanian bible

do what you gotta do but i want my share..

dont let it put you off
was toning up my tedium                                     
my large as i life is only helium                             
i got all my heart and soul in them   
so when you meet the big boss man beware
theres only sand in your albanian bible
do what you gotta do
but i want my share
what im doin it for
you owe it me..
i wish you well, wont pay my bills
or rock my rocking chair

so im keeping my blues, subterranean
but my thoughts are roaring out,  like a stadium   
got my heart and soul in them and
i want my share, what im doing it for
you owe it me..
i wish you well,
wont pay my bills
or rock my rocking chair
i want my share

nooms/connor 2019

PaulyX:
This is really great guys.  Delicious balanced production.  The acoustic riff that opens it draws you in immediately.  I loved the lyrics, just the right shade of cryptic for me ("Albanian bible" - what's going on there?  And the non-sequiturs like "not paying your bills or your rocking chair".  Ain't no lazy spoon/moon/June-ing going on here).  Your voice sounds great Nooms, you've probably had this before but I thought it had a Chris Rea-esque husky charm to it.  Top work and a foot tapper, I can't think of any suggestions to improve it.

shadowfax:
Super lyrics and top notch instrumentation..cool singing, this is radio ready for sure...perfection guys.. :) 8)

Anthony Skye:
My two cents:

Melody and production are top notch. Radio ready.
I might add a twist on lyrics and vocals. Maybe some small parts that move faster with the beat. It might be
just my personal preference with pop music that is hearing this and it might too far out
of the blues that you are going with here. 

cowparsleyman:
@nooms - whos the vocalist and lyricist? Simple brilliant work...sequel to Underfelt..

...seems to be some varying verbs.. dry Lvox and 12 string, drums are a bit wet, solo gtrs have a bit...maybe stick a tad on the 2buss...
But not much

Love it guys...very very good

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