[PaulG]

My first venture , recorded via Reaper/Focusrite, just me, guitars, vocals & violin VST. I'd be grateful for any constructive and harsh criticism! I feel my writing & playing is ok but  the technology of physically recording/mixing is a pain!
https://soundcloud.com/paul-givens-167466279/all-of-us-suffer-for-love
 

ALL OF US SUFFER FOR LOVE

Every train I ride, every road I drive, every journey I'm thinking of you
Seasons run, snow to sun, I don't notice now you've gone
Can we just freeze time, pause, rewind, begin again
I know I was wrong, too late once you've gone, all of us suffer for love

I told no one that you had gone, pride led me to this fall,
Things were said that we both regret before you closed the door
I'm too easy to bruise, the boy with stones in his shoes, couldn't follow you
I know I was wrong, too late once you've gone, all of us suffer for love

It's oh so tough when you fall in love with a girl who has a wandering soul
She'll abandon her roots first sign of any roots, restless for the road
Planning her escape, I was too late to realise
For I know I was wrong, too late once you've gone, all of us suffer for love

But this heart will still beat I'll get back on my feet, scars will heal and fade
From time to time you'll slip back into my mind, I'll smile for those happy days
Wisdom comes with age, in time we'll reach the stage of forgiveness
I know I was wrong, too late once you've gone, all of us suffer for love

Every train I ride, road I drive, every journey I'm thinking of you
Seasons my run, snow to sun, I don't notice now you've gone.

[nooms]

hiya @PaulG

well it works for me
your vocals remind of folk men like nic jones or john james .. in a good way
lovely feel and light touch on the acoustic..
and the xtra vox on the last part is perfect
nicely put together sounds warm
be good if you could post the words ..

and welcome to the forum.. put yourself about..
lots of good people on here

[PaulG]

Thanks very much for your kind words, I've now posted the lyrics.

[pompeyjazz]

Hi Paul,

Reaper and Focusrite eh ? The same setup as me. Well played and sung. The DAW thingy can be pretty intimidating when you first start but you have certainly come to the right place for advice. My recommendations for some slight production changes on this one would be....

1. Look at enhancing you vocals with EQ and maybe add a touch of reverb.
2. Double up the guitar and pan 10 to and 1o past, both with a slightly different eq - Also you could look at adding a touch of reverb again.

This is good work Paul - Welcome to the Forum

[Skub]

A very sweet/melancholic offering. Very well done,a song and performance to be proud of.

I don't see any lyrics on soundcloud or here as yet.

Welcome to here,hope you get involved,Paul.

[Andreas]

Welcome to the forum, @PaulG!

Very well played and sung, with a sweet folky touch to the song

Cheers

[PaulG]

Thanks for kind words & advice

[PaulyX]

Hi Paul, welcome to the forum.  (We need more Pauls, there are only about 6 of us).  I thought it was a lovely track, a spiffing piece of music-box folk.  I like the 'circularity' of the melodies, if you know what I mean - it all felt very smooth and comfortable.  I couldn't make out all of the words (I'd probably boost the vocals track a bit, maybe give it just a hint of effects too, some reverb?), but the lyrics I could make out were solid and very befitting of the genre.  The guitar playing was clearly very accomplished too - if you were ever inclined to really polish it, there were a couple of instances of fret-buzz I noticed, but in its present form they give it that live organic feel.  Anyway, great track to show up with, I hope you stick around.  Pauly

[PaulG]

Thank you Paul for kind words, advice and encouragement.. It's appreciated

[PaulAds]

Hi Paul

Lovely acoustic playing and the strings are sweet too. Really nice vocals as well.

Very accomplished. It sounds you know exactly what you're doing...and if I could do this, I'd do it too 

Excellent!

I'd also have liked to follow the lyric.

By the way, you might need to update the link...it didn't take me to the song at first.

[PaulG]

Thanks Paul, have updated the link

[MonnoDB]

Lovely song @PaulG - I really like the arrangement too, suits the folky style of it and the strings are a nice touch. Everything well performed. I particularly liked the lyrics - a well written piece. I also really liked the harmonies on the last lines - lovely touch!

Welcome to the forum!

[Unabashed]

Paul, I loved your song. There’s Roger Waters tinge to it. I’d addres the lyrics: they’re lovely and achieve what you want when they’re vague. Remove the autobiographical elements and aim for ambiguity of all the songs I’ve listened to today on this forum this is the best. You could easily make this 2 minutes and it would punch you hard in the heart. Beautiful song. Thank you. .

[adamfarr]

If that's a first recording, then roll on the second, third and nth others!

Really nice playing and use of strings. I like the gentle vocal delivery too, seems very appropriate for the song. The harmonies are really effective to give some variation when they come in.

Please do let us see the lyrics. I suspect you may have a verse that has some nice elements but which doesn't necessarily add anything to our understanding of the story and which could be dropped to add more power to the others. Or maybe not!

Welcome indeed - it also sounds like you'll have some interesting opinions and perspective to give to others, which is what this place is all about.

[Wicked Deeds]

Lovely interplay between the two guitars. This is simply a beautiful, reflective, heartfelt song and yes, we d o ndeed suffer for love.  Beautiful!

Paul