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Jill, Bruce Springsteen and me
Wicked Deeds:
It's been a while since I posted. I've been stockpiling songs and now that I've moved back to my home town and began to organise my home, it won't be long before I start to record my acoustic sketches in my studio. Perhaps this might be the first......
Jill, Bruce Springsteen and me
Jill looked for a sign
'twas on the radio;
a sign that love might be.
It was Jill, Bruce Springsteen and me.
A storm cloud filled the sky,
water surged below.
I held her in my arms
'til we kissed and then let go.
Perhaps I'll catch her
in a sleepless moment.
Though it's far more likely In a dream!
I came in search of love.
Her calmness soothed the pain.
The thunder wasn't heard
so we began again.
I may reflect upon
my journey to today.
A girl with storm cloud eyes
Caught my gaze then walked away.
Perhaps I'll catch her
In a sleepless moment.
Though it's far more likely In a dream!
Jill looked for a sign
'twas on the radio;
a sign that love might be.
It was Jill, Bruce Springsteen and me
Written by Paul Vasey August 2019
HappyDays:
Hey Wicked Deed,
The title really drew me in, so I had to check what it was about.
After reading the lyrics a few times, I came up with what the lyrics were talking about. At first, I thought it was about a one-night stand between two people - as they make love while listening to Springsteen. Then I also thought if this was an homage to a Springsteen song. I also thought if this was all a dream/fantasy of a woman the guy came up with.
I'm not sure which one of those is the real story. Maybe I'm just really daft and I didn't see the obvious.
Solid start and I hope to read more of your work.
Rocky
PaulAds:
This is super, Paul.
Almost conversational, with its hook line....very classy.
Made to measure...not just a remnant... I'm sure it'll make an excellent song...
adamfarr:
It's a really interesting lyric. I couldn't help wondering which Bruce song had that effect on her (Thunder Road? or more ironically Hello Sunshine?)
I really like the short lines and non-obvious storyline.
I saw that you had "storm cloud" twice - which opens up some different meanings - but I couldn't tell whether that was deliberate or not.
Anyhow, this looks to me like a large and fertile acorn.
Paulski:
Hi other Paul ;D
I like how this one lets the listener fill in the blanks based on his/her own perceptions of the imagery (which are strong BTW). A couple of tiny suggs:
--- Quote ---It was Jill, Bruce Springsteen and me.
--- End quote ---
I think you can lose the "It was" unless you need the syllables musically.
and
--- Quote ---water surged below.
--- End quote ---
-- suggest you check the plumbing ;D ;D
Good stuff as usual
Paul
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