Wake up

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Girlinside

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« on: August 11, 2019, 01:16:16 AM »
Written listening to cloudburst oasis

Wake up it’s a beautiful morning
can’t you see Katie Wilson’s in pain ?
I don’t get easier as I get older

I can feel the rain
I can feel the pain
It’s taking me over

Wake up it’s a beautiful morning
I think I’ll cut my wrists today
to show you much I hurt

The blood and tears
running together

I can feel the pain
the wind don’t bother me

Wake up it’s a beautiful morning
I don’t know how much more I can take

I can feel the pain oh yeah oh yeah

the beat of my heart is slowly
the light in my eyes diminished
Oh yeah yeah

does anyone really understand
the need to be the woman inside

they look like I’m a freakkk
I can feel the rain I can feel the pain
Oh yeah oh yeah
It’s taking me over

Wake up it’s a beautiful morning
It could be the last one I have
Wake up it’s a beautiful morning
It could be the last one I have
Wake up it’s a beautiful morning
It could be the last one I have







HappyDays

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« Reply #1 on: August 11, 2019, 01:34:31 AM »
Hey Girlinside

When you mentioned Cloudburst by Oasis, I googled the lyrics just for reference to your song. I've gotta say, It's very much a reductive version of the song you were inspired by. A few of the lines are just carbon copies to the oasis one. There's a bit of nuance to it by including the reference of a Katie Wilson and the "need to be the woman inside". If you're going for a person who wants to write about a man who's been struggling and hurting in his journey towards being free from societal pressures, then by all means - write that beautiful story.

To have inspiration from another song is one thing, but I don't think your use of inspiration was efficient.