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MichaelA:
Hi all - here is something that I have done which is a bit quirky as usual, but with a mildly more serious side. The main problem I thought I had was that for a simple indie pop song it was getting a bit long, so I halved the first chorus, which is designed to help it zip along a bit. Hopefully this worked.


It's also an attempt at a quirky ballad, which I have found a harder nut to crack, with the slower tempo required for the most part.


https://soundcloud.com/michael-a-duffy/24-hour-emotional-breakdown-service

Lyrics:

24 Hour Emotional Breakdown Service

Got your message, on my way
Donned my overalls right away
Mission improbable
Distress signal faraway

Turnaround your sat nav said
But hoping heart and stubborn head
Made sure you carried on
To one big mess instead

Guess I'm the guy who'll patch the holes
In your punctured lovely soul
24 Hour Emotional Breakdown Service
And the call out is free
Yours exclusively

Well I thought you'd had enough
Of the rocky road of love
All bumping dodgem cars
The ride out there is rough

When I get there see you sob
This looks like a quite big job
I gently splice the widget
Adjust the thingamabob


Guess I'm the guy who'll patch the holes
In your punctured lovely soul
24 Hour Emotional Breakdown Service

Got manuals and all the tools
To dry your tears, make it all cool
24 Hour Emotional Breakdown Service
And the call out is free
Yours exclusively


Then in the twilight
Wish I could seize this night
You look away
I look away
It's not our way
So not our way
My lovely one

RPT CHORUS

My lovely one

cowparsleyman:
@MichaelA - Very nice indeed, love the B3...beautifully placed BVox, hooky M8, clever stuff Mike.

Possible opportunity for another vocal in the M8.

Loved the 'Yours exclusively' lyric.

Glad you resisted any temptation to put a solo instrument break in.

Yip...all very well done.

CaliaMoko:
This is so clever! And I swear, I'm not easy to entertain. Although my kids may beg to differ when I keep stopping to look at bugs and rocks when we're on a walk....but I digress.

The only nit I have is a picky-roony one--I'm obsessive about clean pronunciation (most of the time, but there are exceptions), so I noticed "Well, I thought chew'd had enough" and would prefer to hear "Well, I thought you'd had enough." But that's my only crit. Very clever. I already said that. Okay....

Vicki

Andreas:
@MichaelA - Loved it! The lyrics are so clever and well written, and I loved the chorus :) And the organs follow the lyrics and your voice in a good way.

Well done! :)

Cheers

pompeyjazz:
Clever stuff @MichaelA Do you get to wear a uniform and drive an emotional support vehicle? I thought that this was quite different for you. I liked the way that you took it down and brought it up again. The lyrics and your slightly sardonic vocal delivery were the winners for me, oh and that dirty organ, is that dirtbag by ant chance? Put a big smile on my face  :)

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